All Comments on 'My Life before You Ch. 01'

Can't wait for next chapter of this masterfully crafted story.

So far so good. What many authors don't know or realise, is that in any genre excluding the Anal genre, that is Any category excluding Anal... Well, this happens to be an erotic literature site after all, but....

To get to the point, a fair number of Lit Members (take this to the bank) are in consensus that no matter how good the plot, character building, grammar, etc etc are, once Anal acts manifests in an otherwise outstanding submission (outside the Anal category), the individual scoring trends are towards 1*. Some readers just do not score at all, leaving the resultant score at reads indicating high, with lower than deserved voting score figures.

Discard or heed to this educated opinion if you wish BBELLC.

Otherwise, as mentioned above, good work, and thank you for your time and effort, you Do have talent.

O yes, I will be looking chapter 3 4 5 and 6. LOL

Can’t hardly wait for the next episode.

More please! Impatiently waiting! Great work!

That is, verb tense.

Not to be That Guy, but i kept getting jolted and sort of put off for a few lines every time the text switched to present tense for a line or two and then back to standard narrative text.

The switching between past tense and present tense drives me crazy.

Another thing that got to me was the reference to the "loan light" that was on. Is that a light that comes on when someone is taking out a loan?