All Comments on 'My Little Sister’s Visit Ch. 01'

Minor editorial nitpick: I don't think she would have had a "liter" bottle of water in 1970. It would have been a quart or maybe 24 ounces. Metric Conversion Act was 1976. Nice set up otherwise. Looking forward to more check marks off of the list.

So far not sure why this story is in this category? If it’s brother/sister should be in incest-taboo.

Great start! Excited to see where this goes!

Yeah, WTF! Why is this story in nonconsent/reluctance? Hell, the only sex in it is the narrator perving on his sister’s underwear. All we learn in this setup chapter is that Steve has a rich asshole for a roommate and a gorgeous eighteen-year-old sister with fantasies.

The author has a history of categorizing all the chapters of a story based upon the most severe chapter. Maybe the label is a warning to anyone expecting a loving incest story. Most of this author’s work is dark nonconsent. Still, I’d welcome a bit of incest.

I guess I’ll give chapter 2 a chance and hope the author picks up his game.

I'm sorry, but you lost a point for continuity error. You wrote about Megan having:

"a liter bottle of water."

I'm pretty sure that I remember from when I was 10 years old that the only bottled water available then came in 5 gallon jugs that mounted on a water cooler. Also, the use of liters in the United States first appeared on gasoline pumps several years later. Soft drinks and water wouldn't have been dispensed in metric containers until some 20 years or so later. But still a great start. I especially love how clueless Steve is about Megan's feelings for him. She's jamming her tongue down his throat and he just accepts it as normal behavior. It's hilarious. 🤣 😆 😂

4/5