All Comments on 'My Marriage Mistake'

Sorry I had to stop reading, it just became silly nonsense after awhile, which is a shame coz this author CAN write.⭐️

This was great. I really enjoyed this book. It was certainly a pleasure to read.

Bryan Phillips

I thought this guy was supposed to be a smart business man?

You said "Thank you for reading my story.", I sa back, thank you for writing it. It is well-written and thoroughly uplifting! Excellent job!

No wonder this man was shot. He's an idiot who keeps picking up strays and is surprised they're full of filth

Although the ending was just a little bit rushed, overall this story gets 5 stars for a happy ending for a really good, self-made man.

Very entertaining. Nice work. 5 stars

He was way over generous. Why give his first "wife" anything? I assume his security guy did the business for him? Other than that a really good story.

To Anonymous, before you criticise ‘big gaps’ and ‘logic leaps’ it would be good if you got the characters right, the main character is RANDY and BARRY is Junes son.

26thNC

26thNCabout 1 year ago

Nothing beats the older LW stories from the great writers like DG Hear. A few of the newer ones are in this class, but not very many.

I have to agree 100%, as this IS the kind of story I look for in the LW forum, and not the "cuckold" stories written and posted day after day (shouldn't those be in the Fetish forum?). It's gotten to the point that I'd rather read non consent or group stories, as they're more believable than the "standard cheating wives/cuckold stories" that follow a standard format that's been laid out by many writers.

I loved it. What a great story, and very well written. Unfortunately last night I only made it to about mid page 3 (before going to bed), but today I restarted at page 3 and finished the story. It held my attention all the way thru. Part of me was looking for a part 2 (to find out if Randy and June had a child together), but you really covered it well.

I gave it 5 stars. Thank You for sharing it with us.

It's like you put a jetpack on your back and launched yourself out of the puddle of shit some of your other stories are.

This is really great work! Congrats!

"Most people would probably think I'm nuts for giving her anything but I wanted her to try and turn her life around."

Yes, this was just stupid, completely non-credible virtue signaling that detracted from the plot...but the rest was fun...so...5

Very good story but Barry was a recklessly generous man, wasn't he? Why reward the wife? And what did June's ex expect to gain by shooting Barry? Some big gaps / logic leaps here!

Great story. Good read. Thanks for writing it. LP

good plot but a little simple

Damn, you write great stories.

I loved the weaving of the plot in this story line. Yes, there are weaknesses but overall it was excellent , hence my 5*.

By he way, is the name BErry or BArry?

BJ

I get that the guy talked about money a lot but have known too many people like that. When something is a big part of your life it becomes everything. Many times it is someone who was forced to grow up fast and help the family.

schwanze - you assume too much, how many people own the other 50 percent? Have you ever heard of stocks?

MC owned fifty percent of some businesses but didn't own the businesses but had control of them? WTF? Do you not know an accountant, lawyer or business owner to aks for help? You control a business when you own MORE than fifty percent. When you own fifty percent, you DO own a business only half of it though.

Married her? Yeah I've seen men do dumber things. 🤣

Page 3

A defensive linebacker? What is that? A linebacker who can't take a joke? There is no offensive linebacker. Linebackers are defense by definition.

End of page 3-When you have been in a bar scrap, be VERY alert when you leave and have a weapon.

More of a death bed confession? It's not often a line makes me bust out laughing. Well done.

If he's promising her five million if they break up, he's a lot more than millionaire. Millionaire isn't really a big deal anymore.

Well that was a helluva lot of fun. Who doesn't want to be Prince Charming to Cinderella?

What does his name being well-known have to do with her taking his name? Why is he surprised that she doesn't mind? Many women keep their maiden names.

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As you said, 'I'm not worth a half million dollars,'" - If Shelby's also fucking, then June won't cost $500,000.

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"The video was on, but there is no sound to these units. It made them a much quieter unit and less detectable." - Cameras don't make any more noise (if any at all) if they also record sound.

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I was wondering why he wouldn't sleep with June even though he knew that Shelby was sleeping with Chuck, then realized that he didn't want June to think that she only got the job for sleeping with him.

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If Shelby was gone, why did he leave her check on the counter?

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It shouldn't have been too hard to get ahold of June, she DOES work for him!

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It was worded poorly, but I assume the $100,000 was in the briefcase, and it was payment for the hits.

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Her ex was stupid. As Lickideesplit said, he should have waited until Randy and June were married, then she WOULD be rich.

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@Anonymous Re: Pre-nup - Without the prenup she could get much more than $5 million. As for the $500,000, it was a wedding present, they were already married, so it had nothing to do with whether she change her mind about marrying him. In any case, it was symbolic: If the plot worked, it would have cost him $500,000 to be with her, he's telling her that it would have been worth it.

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@Anonymous Re: Ahem - He went back and forth, First it was one brother and twin sisters, then one sister and two brothers, I don't remember if they were twins or not, then back to one brother and two sisters, again I don't remember if they were twins or not.

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@HighlandLaddie and Anonymous, of course Bruce was the cause of the deaths, that's what the $100,000 and gold card were for. Anonymous, since it was his gun, it's highly likely that it was the ex, though for the reasons given above it's possible that Chuck did it for revenge.

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@timriv, we don't know what was in the briefcase, though it's likely it was the 100K, the sentence was worded poorly. But he also gave him one of his gold cards. They're like "Get Out Of Jail Free" cards, if Bruce ever needs ANYTHING, he only needs to ask.

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@Anonymous Re: "The ending was crap" - The killers weren't killed "immediately." The cops said they turned up yesterday. He was in a coma for 7-9 days, and I think he was awake for a day or two before the cops spoke to him.

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@Anonymous Re: "I Loved The Story Until..." - They're married, she has access to ALL of his money, as noted above the check is symbolic of what he would have had to pay Shelby if the plan had worked, i.e. to have her would have been worth at least $500K.

Don't always love your stories, but this is definitely a 5.

Excellent

Lovely story about a guy who marries the wrong woman but finds the right woman later in life and they thrive together. Very heart-warming tale about someone who chooses wrong but recovers to make the right choice in the end. I gave the story 5 stars.

Just love it when true love takes over Thank you Mr hear (jaybee186)

Excellent story, well written with great characters. Well done 5 stars

Nothing beats the older LW stories from the great writers like DG Hear. A few of the newer ones are in this class, but not very many.

Very good read.

I think this DG Hear is one good writer as I have read some of his stories.

Thanks DG Hear.

Excellent

What a great tale. Warms my heart. There are some good people in the world.

Five Stars

Soft touch.He gives the slut three hundred thousand dollars and jobs to relatives,who never offered any help to his family whilst they struggled as he grew up.How did he get to achieve what he did?

What an excellent story with a great ending...loved it!! 5*

LOVED IT!

...too much about money. Don't get me wrong - that's the character and he is interesting. I just think that as characters go, it's a personality flaw that makes me think less of him. Then again, it seems appropriate to his nature and business. It's still a good story.

I really liked it a lot . As far as the political ramifications, IT's all bullshit. The guy has a heart of gold. If rewarding good people, and helping the downtrodden makes him a " Democratic whatever, " so what . The politically correct should keep their mouths shut. Keep writing ,buddy, and maybe Barry will pay the jerks a visit. 7and 1/2 stars from the Bears private account. The Bear approves. Grow up people .

The BEAR

The check he gave her on their wedding night makes her a high paid prostitute. Her own credit card with a half million dollar credit line would have been more appropo. He did seem to enjoy throwing his money around. And he either knew or suspected that his head of security had Ross and Woody killed. I have no problem with that.

Why the need to inject politics into your comment Anon 04/21/20?

Great story DG thanks!

by Anonymous

04/21/20

Compliment the Author's story and then list all the faults in it.

Just what you'd expect from two-faced fucks... aka your typical Democrat hypocrites.

It's a damned good story..... PERIOD. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

(p.s. I wanted to fuck his sisters.)

The author would never believe this but this story is a good outline of my life.

Just what you'd expect from two-faced fucks... aka your typical Democrat hypocrites.

It's a damned good story..... PERIOD. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

(p.s. I wanted to fuck his sisters.)

The author would never believe this but this story is a good outline of my life.

A lot going on, but ended in a good place. Another good one from DG, who has a lot of them.

When June goes for the interview,Marla recognises the gold card and later tells how much clout Randy has.Yet when Randy turns up she doesn't recognise either the gold card or him.

Everything just so perfect that it begs belief. However, I liked it notwithstanding. I was partly refreshed by the writer's command of our language as evidenced by correct spelling and syntax. A nice feel-good story with everything turning out perfectly for those in the white hats. I gave it four well-earned stars ...

Great story, Seldom do I find stories about a good human being. Loved it

He throws around so much money, that the generosity is lost. Taking care of everyone is great, consistent with a caring and generous man. Even paying the ex to get lost is fine. But a check for his new wife on their wedding night? Give her a credit card, maybe setup a half million trust fund for each of her kids. Giving the wife a check only serves to tell her what he thinks she’s worth.

Also, the story would have worked well if Randy had explained his background to June — how he grew up, dropped out, made himself... to set her mind at ease about her meager circumstances.

Another excellent story. I love the romances that you seem to be able to write about so wonderfully. This time about a very honorable and fair man and a new love and family that will love him forever. Bravo

A cool guy wanting to help his woman. I liked it.

At the very least you could have given it some thought, like a gift card to her favorite store. LOL

No really, it did sound like buying affection. Maybe, since she really loved her kids, a Trust for her lids, say for tuition and board to any school they wanted, through graduate school. Or...

Maybe “buy” her a business in some field he found she had an interest in? Like if she liked needle point, a needle point and embroidery specialty shop (really exists, swear to God).

If she liked riding, perhaps a 5 acre horse barn and stables.

SOMETHING that shows he gave thought to the expensive gift — a check, for crying out loud.

Excellent story,a bit abbreviated but nonetheless very nice. From his teens he supported his Mother in her struggle to maintain the family. A self made man who knew not to spread largessse amongst his relatives. Instead the deserving were placed in good jobs. Enjoyed the story. Thank you and 5*s.

If he can give Shelby three hundred thousand dollars,how come he doesn't spread a little largess amongst his family.Also when did Brenda's husbands birthday party get rearranged.?

I loved this, yes there were things left out yet it still told the story. I am a damn strong female and yet the caring and love well it is not often you find it and a man who is willing to fight for it sorry that is sexier than anything. I want my lover and my best friend to be in my bed and be the same person.

Why was he shot? The reason given by the author is crap! There was no explanation of who killed his attackers. They were killed immediately after they attacked him and none of his friends were present at that time. There is a huge hole in the plot.

$100,000 for Bruce for knocking off the two hoods. Give me a break he gave his ex $300,000 fo fucking him over. He owed this guy much more than than what he gave him.

Enjoyed the story I'd have loved to know who shot him was her EX. or was it actually Chuck Woody with her EXs. gun.

Other than the story got a BIG FIVE STARS.

especially when a setup and blackmail is involved, TK U MLJ LV NV

I have read this a few times I love it, keep writing great stories

And of course it was Bruce, he'd been trusted with security and to keep an eye on Chuck, so to protect his boss fell within his job description.

but you left us with the mystery of just who shot him and why....was it Chuck and the asshole ex...and did big Bruce do it protecting him....we will never know....

NO. It was fucking great. !!!!!

Darn, you really came up with a wonderful story and it was well written. Thanks for sharing if with us.

The actual story was quite good but your writing style here was really 2nd rate - I expected a far higher standard from you. This is possibly your least effective story you've written, a competent 12 year old would probably surpass this effort. A very lucky 3 ***

As usual,an outstanding story by DG Hear!

like the idea of him being a drop out but making it big off his own bat...a good little tale....wonder if man mountain was the cause of those two jerks winding up in the lake....we will never know...in the end...true love conquered all...nice one....

At first I thought what the heck am I reading, but as I got into the story I enjoyed it!

Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.

kind of a feel good story, but good. Sounded, like Rambo, in casual clothes, with a touch George Hamilton. I don't normally like the stories where the Hero always knows what's going on, or exactly how to react to every situation, it's just too far from reality. This was a nice feel good story.

If you were an ex-Hubby, why would you try to kill the guy that could make your ex-Sweetie rich if you think you can get big money out of her? I would be guarding his ass until they marry! Then ... well, the picture turns around big time!

Why would ex-Hubby go out to the dance-hall with Chuck? Even if it made sense, why did he and the third guy wait outside while Chuck is acting-out with New Sweetie? And how do either know where Our Hero and New Sweetie are going that night? Think it through ... don't just write one interesting scenario after you finish the previous one

The story line is interesting but the dialogue is so stiff and stilted that it's almost as if it were written by a computer program. I did enjoy it though.

a delightful story. Five stars.

Did you not write that he had ONE brother and TWIN sisters??

So why this bungle?? ((("It's like I already raised a family, my brothers and sister."))) A REALLY DUMB MISTAKE BUT A CASUAL PROOF READ WOULD HAVE PICKED IT UP. .... assuming that the proof reader was halfway alert and paying attention to business.

Five stars.

For five minutes of harmless fun.

....Why the hell not?

However DGH writes it, is mighty fine by me!

shit eating smile once I finished the story. DG is a fine writer and he did not disappoint with this one. Even though it was kind of cheesy. Not convoluted or complex or wanting to moralize. Just totally enjoyable read. I am kind of cheap at handing out 5 stars, but this one simply forced my hand. So with a grin and kudos to DG ......"Well Done !!"

I loved the whole story, and was really happy with the ending.

Definitely a five star fun story with hordes of drama and money. Cheating girlfriends and wives up the gazoo. I could offer advice but why spoil it? Thanks for the effort and entertainment!

I thought DGH went overboard with Randy's money to express Randy's love for June. Surely if a spouse can give away five million bucks for a failed marriage why need a pre-nup agreement in the first place? And what is this about giving five hundred grand as a wedding present. Is he so afraid she might change her mind about marrying him?

Yes, maybe this story was over the top. But I enjoyed it. I guess I just like Love stories where two people eventually fall into a real, true Love. I am entertained when cheaters lose and non-cheaters win. I really felt good for Randy and June at the end. Thank you for writing this enjoyable, entertaining tale.

Randy is just a tad bit extravagant throwing money around. Trucking owners are tighter than a mouse's ear. Good writing and reading. Cheers!

great story one of the best I have read

Thanks for the happy read (my second time around)! 5 Stars

You have a great range as a writer...one of my favorites.

That was a very good story.

would like this

...TERRIFIC !!

Works for me.

...and I still think it is one of your best! Please more like this one. 5 Stars, of course..

I loved this story and the characters were perfect with the exception of June's ex. Thank you for the ride

And one of the very few most excellent storys on this site. Very well done DG. Thank you.

Now that's what I call a great story.

Certainly enjoyed it, even though the attempted murder was a bit over the top the strongest element of the story was the true love story of the hero and June his heroine. This relaltionship seemed to hold a nugget of truth to it and could happen in real life also. His identification with the struggles of a single mother and her kids as was his own mother was quite strong and quite real also.

Walt Disney isn't it?

Good though.

This is one of the best I have read.

he smoked a meaty cock, got a buggered cornhole, betrayed!

I did, that's why I gave it 5*!

A wonderful story. It doesn't get much better.

Really enjoyed reading it. More of that kind, please!! It was a pleasure..

Just all about fun - good people who made it and stupid people who didn't -

I am not one for reading, but this story was great.

Mike

Well done, great read.

You covered a lot of ground. The story was very entertaining. Thanks for sharing.

Some things I didn't like but nevertheless I rated it 5*****s.