All Comments on 'My Mom and the Bully Ch. 02'

Your stories are good but you need to make the chapters longer

Chapters too short and story seems to be all over the place. I don't mind the main character being omnipotent but whipping out papers proving embezzlement by the principal was a little much. You need to focus more on the setup and go into details rather than all of a sudden have John fucking his mom and getting blown by Cindy all in the matter of 5 or 6 paragraphs. I love the topic and your writing seems good just more details and longer chapters would make it even better. Thanks for the posts.....

I have to admit. I like this so far. I have a feeling this story is going into another group in the next chapter or so.

i'm a bookworm and the chapters are way to SHORT,longer please ,sorry to shout! John will be knackered by the end of the week! all that sex

keep writing this one chapters could be longer but not just to add words

This is a great story with a lot of potential. I like how instead of making the son a wimp you have him as someone who is stronger. Also he fucks his mom!! A +.

Some advice. If you want.

More details. Example the gangbang scene could have been more detailed.

And second, have a twist where the son starts controling the mom and getting revenge on the bullies.

Also only the mom as the star actress and only female..

When Cindy was giving you a blow job you wrote, "before I can object she has her dick and my mouth". Please read your story over a few times for grammar, spelling and the obvious, wording. Just as a suggestion, you may want to have another author review your story first before publishing. I like how the story is progressing. Keep up the good work.

Hmm!!!!With that she drops to her knees and before I can object she has her dick in my mouth. Now, I haven't had many blowjobs but this one was the best so far. 

..,,,.....I bet yea I know he will have a VERY big dick.

Sounds like Dickens, doesn't it? I would like to hear more of this story. I am a practitioner of Tai Kwon Do, and I seem to feel a kindred spirit, although I have never had the situation where I was forced to use it.

Sadly, though it turns out that according to the bio the author is a sexless, ageless person inhabiting no known place in the universe. So I don't know whether to congratulate him, her, or it. Let me take a wild guess and assume "a fighter" is a male. I don't care much for his hero Johnny getting a blowjob from this Cindy girl. Johnny actually is a hero, and he's gotten a hero's reward--the same cunt he came out of. No way can his mother do without her boy's big hard cock in the future.That should keep Johnny for a while.

What a story. Thanks for sharing.

Bust up more bullies! I love it! Make them into pretzels! Twist them until every bone breaks! Remove jawbones, kneecaps and butt craps! Pull off eyebrows, shave off beards and choke on pubi hair!

This is more like a comedy/fighting manual. Love it anyway.

I'm quite enjoying this. I just wish they were longer. They're a wonderful read though.

I'm really hoping for more bully+mom humiliation. The first story was really hot even though you didn't go into much detail about the sex.I would of loved it if john would of watched his mother get gang banged and secretly enjoy it, Then go kick their asses.

You've watched Robert Downy Jr in Sherlock Holmes movies way too many times lol. Also less fag fighting and more mom fucking would improve the story immensely. Seems to be a good plot just needs more loving thy mother, take your time with her she'll love you more for it.

I like this story, both chapters were quite good, but i have one thing to ask of you. P,ease oh please keep the main character dominant. It might be just me, and it might be stupid of me to ask this on this kind of story, but i hate stories where the main character is humiliated or cuckolded.

It's your story, so do what you want, but that's my preference.

I'd much rather have a story where the MC dominates those around him (sexually and physically) than one where his mother gets fucked in front of him etc...

gj

Great Story!!! Do not listen to anon's cuz this is a good story! Waiting for next!!

When cindy was going to blow John, you wrote "she has her dick in my mouth" that's a pretty big plot twist

Is there going to be anymore of this series?

Also pls tell how u broke the knee?

I guess the football team doesn't have a backup B squad. We lost our Quarterback to injuries along with a Linebacker, Full back and the replacements turned out to be better than those they replaced. yes they didn't have a full years expirence but being put into the lime light, they excelled. I guess there is no continued. Please read your finished work... twice. that way, we won't find out that Cindy is a Transsexual. (she drops to her knees and before I can object she has her dick in my mouth.)

Too short!

Was this intended as a comedy? Well you've succeeded. I see absolutely no redeeming quality to this story. Not erotic, not plausible in the least.

John's Mom is a whore and she obviously cares more about getting herself off with some of the worst people imaginable than taking care of her own son.

One of the worst Stories I ever read