All Comments on 'My Sister and I Ch. 01'

A fast start. Since this is chapter chapter 1, I hope you will slow this down some and let them explore and love each other. You can make this many enjoyable chapters and gather more readers. I look forward to reading more. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Hot n sexy romp I hope they move in together and make babies. What will the family think about that?

Can’t wait for the next chapter

Don't continue. It doesn't work like that, even in fantasy land. Sister shows up, changes into bikini, has a few drinks, grabs brothers crotch, gets naked and says fuck your sister.

You blew your chance to make a good first impression.

Shor, sweet, sexy, but I like eating pussy and getting blowjobs too.

Keep your day job

Dont be so repetitive, expand your dialog, flesh out your characters , other than that, average, three stars

I agree with everything "Eugenia4al" said.

Just a little polish makes a big difference.

Hot, fast, and short lived euphoria. Same as my score. Made a quick stab and hit the button then it all wore off. If you can’t make the sequel longer with more depth, then don’t.

...Ch. 02.

I like the setup but it was to quick. I would think you would have had him go down on her. It would have been so hot.

Zero build up. Pace it a bit

Good first story. Thanks for not having oversized tits and monster cock.

Please another longer chapter.

Too many people emphasize build up and when they don't get much they get pissed off. I, for one, am not a build up fan as most of it is boring(yawn). You did great. 5*

Can't wait for more. Is very hot.

It's very hot, and thanks for sparing us a huge, boring build up. But every story needs a little development, perhaps some reluctance to overcome. Otherwise you might as well just say "you're really hot Debi, wanna fuck?"

A bit more build up, if you would

Really good start