All Comments on 'My Sister Blows Me in My Tent Ch. 03'

Nice a blow job under water is HOT!!!

I just love reading about these two.

So, she's part fish............ 2*

What a beautiful story .

Brother and sister showing love and affection.

Will you let Liz join in the frolicking

Premise still good.

Story still rushed.

Three stars.

Still a good premise.

Still rushed. Still lacks in details. It reads like there's a rush to get to the end of the chapter.

You wrote: "I felt her hands on my balls as she caressed them. They felt so good as they moved over each ball. They started to tighten and I could feel my cum about to shoot out." Three short sentences like a Reader's Digest piece. Needed details, details, details, bout how she reached for his balls. Exactly what did she do when she first touched them? Then what? Then what? Perhaps some dialog with her asking him if it felt good? How good? Should she play with his balls more or play with his cock? Or maybe both?

Needed many more details about what she did with her mouth on his cock. Just telling us that she took it in her mouth and he came doesn't do it.

Three stars.

Ok…How do you give a BJ under water and breath?

Hope they don’t drown.

5 Stars. Another nice chapter.