All Comments on 'My Sister Eva Started It All'

This is a great story, very well told. Any chance of a sequel... Robin and Evie's 'talk', maybe? Keep up the good work.

Loved this! Incest is one of my favorite type of stories and this is one of the best I have read. Please continue it!! Either with Eva and her mom's "talk" or even with their future plans to marry. Great job!

yes there is a sequel to this story

it's called My sister eva continues it all

look under the DEZURTDAWG name to find it

Well, this story is fairy-tale-kind, but it's somehow fun to read. Thanks for a nice evening.

Trully kinky could it continue, perhaps with Mom and Evie's talk and Amber tagging along as the 'sis-in-law and later dad joining in? what do u think?

Is there a sequal. That was really hot and sexy.

Damn - I do like reading your stories !!

You kept my dick hard through almost the entire afternoon! Thank you for a nice afternoon!

I quit reading at 11 1/2" dick. if i cant find a story believable, i don't read it.

This is the same thing on fanfiction

great read loved it thanks

was a great read

OHMIGOD if anyone wants to hook up post a comment! This made me so horny...

This made me way harder than I thought it would. I'm interested in your take ;)

that was unbelievable and so hot and sexy even if it was illegal

IF LOVIN YOU IS WRONG I DON'T WANNA BE RIGHT!!!!!!!!!!

Damn. This the best story I've read by far!

I just cummed with a screw driver in my pussy . Great story he sounds hot .

great story hope mores cumming on this story its pretty hot

Stopped reading after page 2, the notion that a 7" cock (apparently it shrunk 1" since the start) is huuuuge and that even at 8" any woman/girl would run away screaming is a clear indication of inexperience since 7 or 8 may be a good enjoyable size and is above average, it's nowhere near huuuuge and terrifying. Eventually it became annoying enough to ruin the story alltogether with some of the other inexperienced flaws in it.

It might have been a bit more believable if you had split it into 3 different stories. Amber, E V, and mom. but putting them all together, and having it all happen in 24 hours or less, made it hard to accept as even remotely possible.

How did this story get such a high rating?

But it never quite delivered. His sister and Amber are such sluts I can't imagine having a serious relationship with then, unless you consider disposable fuck toy a serious relationship. Tossing the mom into the mix didn't help either.

good story I do not know what they are bitching about

He just needs to make Dad his bitch, impaled on his cock; then they all can wander around naked and fucking all day every day.

It's a great story overall there's a reason why its called a fantasy people nothing has to be exactly true if you want to read a realistic story you got to go find something else who are you to judge what the writer puts into a story may I remind you that you're reading this and probably knocking one off only because of the fact that you can't get any yourself so instead of trying to degrade the story how about you actually look into the actual story line doesn't have to exactly line up with reality nowadays who the f*** cares there are plenty of people out there who make plenty of different story types go find something else if you're going to degrade this man's work as for the author I want to congratulate you on making a great story keep writing don't let these dumbasses go and get you down and tell you otherwise I'm looking forward to chapter 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 and so on and so forth until you decide to stop writing on this story again great job with the story looking forward to the next one in the series

OMG loved it PLEASE right more!

This series was fantastic.

. It was a definite 10 but since the top is 5 I settled for that. Keep up the good work.

Porn with humor. I loved it.

While I am in awe of his equipment, I was even more impressed by the three ladies abilities to use it. Keep up the good work.

PARDON THE PUN. I REALLY LIKE THE STORY. IT IS IN MY FAVORITES

RON TEXAS

:))) What a shit :)))

There should be more stars. GREAT!!!!!!!!

This was a great story. I would love for a sequel to be written so that I can enjoy that one too

The hat trick. Now Dale has all the fine women he wants. Greeeeeat as Tony the tiger would say or Even better as Dale's lovers will say. 10 stars plus

Ron Texas cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

One of the best writers/stories on here, sad I don't see more of your work.

"We spent the next four hours switching back and forth as I would fuck one of them to two or three orgasms and then switch to the other"

Damn, Dale, don't you know that should you have an erection lasting more than four hours you should see your doctor????

listen to the comments left by your readers. You have to continue with this. 5 stars +

I love ur story dude!!!!!!!!! its sooo awe!!!

Keep writing! pls!!!

It was marathon sex without much intimacy. In fact, after the descriptions of his relationship with his sister, the idea that she didn't kick his balls up around his ears for sexual "fraud" when she found out doesn't make sense. Assuming, of course, she couldn't tell the guy she got so close to that he was literally inside her was the brother she had lived with her entire childhood.

The author seems to think a big prick makes everything work out alright in the end. That, and the main character's rampant, almost comical egomania, blew any ability to suspend my disbelief. As others have commented, every woman he meets (including his mother!) just starting to blow him after a few minutes in his presence? That kind of plot belongs in the mind control category.

Despite all that, the mechanical sex itself was fairly well done. If the author can just give us actual reasons to care about his characters, his future stories could greatly benefit.

One last note to those posting the reflexive, childish and even death-threat-laden defenses of the writer and his work. The comment section exists for a reason. Nobody gets better at writing by just hearing empty praise.

For those making the specious argument that no one should comment negatively when they can just go read something else, the narcissistic author can simply turn off the comments for their stories if they don't want public feedback, or if they believe their work will be judged unfairly.

If the reader is just supposed to "keep it to themselves" if they have criticism, then anyone else can make the argument (which I disagree with, by the way) that maybe the author should "keep it to themselves" and not bother submitting stories. I don't believe in either.

I always hear folk say "Jesus H" but I never knew what it meant. I'm sure that's just me though. The story is great and I have it bookmarked. I'll admit I do have fantasies about this, I don't think it's possible. It's very hot and I'm glad I found this. Thank you for working so hard to make this a great story. Keep it up -Elisa <3<3

Amber was the star of the story for me and I really enjoyed the description of the scenes giving all the details. I loved it and would encourage you to write more.

Wow, that's a long comment! How come you haven't posted a story of your own?

I know why you didn't seem to like my story; it contains none of the following: "School Uniforms, Cheerleaders, Lingerie and French Maids"! Definitely your fetishes, not mine.

I do wonder why, when another reader comments in defense of an author, you suddenly decree the story writer to be a "narcissistic author" who should "turn off the comments for their stories if they don't want public feedback". That is a huge, and unfair, leap to decide on your own that the defensive comments were apparently posted by the author him/herself.

I choose to let most comments remain posted unless they are particularly vile or offensive. (After all as you know that is the job of the author to monitor the comments and delete as needed.) Yours will stay.

Anyway, TDF, thanks for reading my story and taking the time to write your comment. Hopefully you also voted, 1 to 5, your choice.

One question...what the hell is that a photo of???????

dezurtdawg

I do have to say I thoroughly enjoyed this story. It is probably in my top 15 incest story list. I will say I do agree with that tall dark guy. It did seem like having a big prick makes everything better but these are just stories. No one wants to read about the night of the four inch dick. Like I said I did truly enjoy this story. I will look forward to reading more of your stories. Thank you very much.

I would like to read a continuation.

Hi, the part with the Halloween costume is excellent. I think you should have stop the story where the sister sees the Spider-Man costume on her brother door.

Love your story

That was an amazing story. I extremely enjoyed it! Looking forward to your next story!

I would love to experience this girls

phoenix23ninja@gmail.com

Email me if you want to make this happen

By the way i dont check email that often

My favorite story!

DAMN! and I thought watching porn was more pleasurable! Hot f**king damn!

That was fucking amazing! You HAVE to do "The continuing story of Dale, Eva, Robin and Amber"

This story was incredible amazing and a wonderful Read in book form I'd read it over and over again. kudos to the author all around great story full of passion a lil drama and lots of sex PERFECT

just wondering could this be a true story

confessions of life???

Who knows 😆😆😆

Great anyways thanks enjoyed

Wow really amazing ....so damm hot ..would love to read next part.

anyone saying this story sucks. ..well fuck him/her

Dale has got it going on! I loved everyone's vocalization, it's just what I would like to hear when I'm fucking some babes! I don't know what I'd do if I had three hot pussy's to fuck!!!

Loved it that story gave me life! I masturbated, while reading the story! This was so good Dale was everything!

Thank you for sharing. I loved the way you write. Reality/fantasy, who fealty gives a damn. It is a story to be read or not. By being in the comments means they've read it to the end So Ignore the anons. Write another chapter, marry Amber, keep fucking both Eva and Robin (mom) and knock them all up.

It's easily worth the 5 stars and thank you again for sharing.

What a load of horseshit! 9 ropes of cum? 10-12 hours straight? Probably a high school student. 1star!

That was incredible. Hard to believe that guy could do it so much & so long. But its a story, right??

Good job, keep it "up"!

Those of you talking shit about this story can't say shit about it. Not one of you bitches could write something that even comes close to being as good as this is. So stfu!!!

You need to write more of this story as a contribution to mankind no wait human kind for we are better for having a story like this u sir are a genius to be celebrated throughout time and space.

Best story on this site,I keep coming back to it. Great story!

I've seen and wrote better. From one too ten, this was about a three.

Yes it had editing errors etc.,etc......... Anon you are so full of yourself. " I have wrote better" well if you have, then I guess you have a very good editor as your use of the English language sucks. I have said it here before if you want to criticize without offering help and support then go to Amazon or iTunes and pay for your stories.

Keep up your efforts dezurtdawg that's how we improve.

Great story, would like to hear more about how they get on later with it :)

One of the best way I have read on here please I beg you to write more

you need to be more realistic and descriptive. people need to be able to relate and insert themselves into the story. the scenario is great but there is no detail and no context. its not a fantasy. and the thing with the 10 inch cock is overboard. i can tell that in the story youre trying to convince us of it. use imagery and adjectives to cover this part.

Amazing story6812

A good storyline in essence, horny teenagers at college, the plot was believable and the story unravelling was logical and enjoyable but it went totally off the rails when you introduced the mother. The language changed to unlikely vocabulary and style for such an interaction. The mother is clearly a closet dirty slut too, despite her conservative values. her reaction was beyond rational belief unless she had been harboring incestuous thoughts for many years. I wish more stories were written where the guy is normally sized and not hung like a horse, its every guys fantasy to be huge, but we're not all made that way.

Sequel...Series?!?

should have spanked Amber , belt whipped the sister, and riding cropped mom's behind for well just because, as a bit more, need to have Amber come back and ask for the spanking like mom received some good cropping,! and maybe a belt job for mom..

sister belted by amber and cropped by mom ~

I wouldn't have believed a 77 year old man (ME) could respond sexually to an internet fuck tale but THIS ONE did the trick!!!!!!! I couldn't believe how much harder my cock got reading this - and how much more volume of cum than I'm used to came shooting out of it - not once - not twice - but THREE FUCKING TIMES!!!!!!!!! You really have a way with words and understand how the fuck mechanism works way better than most.

I just wish that the story could be true with me in the starring role!

A delight to read and enjoy from the art of incest story telling in a five star way.

It is so wonderful, that all three girls love him/his cock, Please plan a Sequel.

The Sweet thing is that there is NO Jealousy, all LOVE.

Needs more

If only. Damn good story. I give it 5 stars but in reality it gets a 4 on the Budweiser Scale !!!(***)

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Wow, thank you and you need to write a follow up. Maybe all three girls taking him on spring break or off for his college graduation and party on an island and showing him a good time. along with he and Amber getting married. what a great story... thanks

He did do another story. Read My Sister Eva Continues It All

enjoyed every page

Lol

Terrific writings - and your description of Eva getting off was likely the most realistic build and climax I have ever read. Truly a great five star story and the inclusion of mom in the mix proved to be a delicious addition in how to describe sex within a family setting. Likely one of the best I've ever read on this site - if not the best.

there could be a little bit of tension somewhere. My Mom was horrified I was fucking my sister, then she saw my dick, then she fucked me: transition time -- 60 seconds.

Amber, eve and mom just fantastic, just

Kept me glued to the story from start to finish. Fucking mum was so hot,

"Even though I have now, as an 18 year old senior in high school, filled out into a 6'2" 210 pound hunk of solid muscles she still calls me that. Trouble is, I no longer have the pencil dick that I had as a baby boy, instead I now sport a solid eight inches that is as big around as my wrist!"

Lying faggot

The author makes a few grammar mistakes here and there, and the characters are a little bit ridiculous. A few run-on sentences don't kill anyone, but this story is like a junky 70's movie. It's not particularly good, but boy does it feel good to read.

Great story.

This reads like a parody of everything an insecure teenager thinks is the definition of manliness and an amazing lover. I really tried to finish the story, and failed.

Wow!

Stunning story, very hot and sexy. Maybe in the limits of the credible sexual resistance of Dale, but I know that`s is a fiction tale.

A sequel are welcome. I don`t know if you have written yet.

5* for you.

I apologize for my English, is not my native language.

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ You definitely have to do a sequel..

good god this is a standard high school level story at best. I get it some dude like reading about huge dick imagine little girl tight pussies and such. I got bore real quick when he mention I have eight inch dick I tune out because he comes the standard cliques ohh so big! bigger than your father just another copy paste story 1/5 rating

Great Story.

Must be nice to have 3 beautiful women want you even though he deceived.Amber and Eva

Ron/cowboyridecc@yahoo

I've read part's of this befor in other stories and this is pretty good though. It could've been been more creative. It just seems like you piccesed it together.

Good to read this one on date night. Really sets the mood for me.

This was so amazing. Great story.

Great story begs a follow up. Mum & Amber, Mum & Evie, Dale with all of them.

How about the three move in together with Mum as a regular visitor? Etc.

Second time around for me too and this is still a very hot read. Loved it.

I wish I could write me dreams down like you can

Reading this makes it really obvious that you're a virgin. Nothing about this story is believable, from the length of your (as long as someone's forearm) dick to the, like, hundred orgasms from Amber. It's just not believable and that kinda killed it for me. I didn't get past page one because every piece of "dialogue" sounds like it's straight out of a 70s porno.