All Comments on 'My Son's Bully Ch. 03'

I can't believe I wasted my time reading this piece of shit story!!!

Why on earth did you waste your time writing this?

If people read this chapter and thought it was crap then I don't get it. The first two chapters were like this and this one is similar to them. If you don't like this sort of things DON'T READ THE STORY.

This story is exactly what I expected and wanted so thanks to Hamgod for writing it. I hope there will be more chapters. This story is delightfully wicked and I love it. It is one of the best of the gender.

This only problem I had with this was that it was under incest. You should have put this under fetitsh. Other than that great part 3 and I can’t wait for part 4 and part 3 of frat party mom.

I get it, if you dont like this kind of thing its fine, its not written for your demographic, but hell if it is, this series is amazing. Ofcourse I do not believe bullying is ok, but because it is not ok and sinful makes this type of thing that much more exotic and erotic. Very well done indeed. Now comes the criticism, im not sure what you are trying to do with Evan here, I believe thier should only be one Dom, now if you are using Evan to exemplify Klay and using Evan as an example of normalcy then its good. I also believe because they way you turned this story you are going to have a hard time continuing it, that doesnt include lots of non sex related scenes and still maintain a good story

didn't read entire chapter1 when able i'll go back reading .......... didn't read

chapter2 like absolutely nothing when able i've am gonna read .......... didn't read

chapter3 like absolutely nothing when able i've am gonna read ..............................

from what i've did literally read about chapter1 - absolutely fantastic

absolutely awesome absolutely phenomenal ...............................................

now that i've did literally say all that [ because none other people

wanna comment about this guess that i'll become person doing ] - - -

W.T.F.F.F.F.F.F.F.F.F.F.F.F.F.F.F.H. :: made this take like two yrs. about doing

" i'm gonna guess that this story takes place immediately after the chapter2 "

were they literally cryogenic~stasis ?????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hi folks, Thanks for reading! I understand that this story is not for everyone and is fairly dark. I agree it belongs in a different category, but since it has mom son voyeurism it has be in the Incest/Taboo.

Good effort but this story was kind of all over the place. I'm a writer on here too, so I don't like to leave negative comments, but I just thought I'd point out what I saw.

I loved the first half and I thought that Gabby was an interesting character and a fun premise. I would have liked to see Klay dominate the office more. The mom keeps up her resistance for a day or two until Gabby develops her oral talents and starts to turn into his main squeeze. The mom (I forget her name) gets jealous-- maybe even punishes Gabby for stealing her man-- and eventually they both succumb. Before long Alvin has to come to the office for whatever reason and finds that Klay is inescapable.

At any rate, the second half had nothing to do with the first part of the story. It wasn't bad-- just not as interesting as the first half (IMHO), was sort of "from out of nowhere" and could have been developed as a whole separate story. I liked the nerd character you introduced at the end but he would have been better with some backstory. It felt like you rushed through 2-3 stories worth of material in one effort.

One idea that might be interesting is if the main woman's (sorry, again, I forget her name) sister comes to town to stay at the house. She could serve a couple of purposes. She could initially be repulsed by what a slut her sister is-- trying to talk her back to sanity-- before falling to the same charms. She could be cruel to Alvin in a way the mom might not be (laughing at his little dick, calling him a fag, etc). And of course, eventually, Klay gets the sisters into bed together.

Not gonna lie, when I saw the Incest/Taboo category I thought Alvin had finally snapped, got a gun and went nuts on them and then went on to putting his mom in her place.

It would be nice if you could do something like that as a side-chapter or something. It doesn't have to be a part of the main story-line but it would be nice just to have it you know? I feel really bad for the kid.

Trash

Yeah , your nonconscent story isn't really a nonconscent lol

Yeah, this story (all three chapters) is really bad like the other comments are saying.

Not sorry about saying that.

You sorry sack of shit!! You probably wanted to be in Alvin's position and made two see your mom become a whore for your bully. It would have been better if Alvin would have tortured his bully killed them after then torture and break his mom as retribution for her being the WORST MOTHER IN ALL OF CREATION!!!!!!!!!!!! DO NOT WRITE ANOTHER STORY AGAIN AS YOUR SHIT AT IT!!!!!!! CREEP! FREAK!!

all 3 chapters were great! And chapter 3 even tops the others, great read! Definitely write more if you feel like it, ignore the hate comments, people hate on everything, you'll never be able to please them, fuck them! You did great.

So there were no great human beings in this story. I notice that the folks who go over the top with their feelings about a story are almost always anonymous. How about this? Give authors the right to unilaterally delete any anonymous comment they wish to.

Really great story hope you continue.

I enjoyed all three chapters and am sad there isn't a fourth. I've read some of the hate comments and I hope you ignore them. It's like the righteous police are on a erotica sight. Probably the only sex they get.

Good job and keep up the interesting work. Would love to see what happens to Kirstin next.

All 3 chapters are just generic "bully fucks Mom" trash with nothing to make it stand out

man please continue plase

You tried to fit too much sex in it is unbelievable

I really enjoyed the story but I need to know how she finished the trial

This is in the wrong damn category there was no incest and the only thing that makes this any different then others is that the cum dump which is a mother didn't openly bully her son though she still openly fucked her son bully and enjoyed it and openly betrayed him so no I have no respect for the writer nor those who said they liked it either way it still promotes bullying

why do they always have to bring in other dudes SIGH

Dude seriously a high school kid tells a grown woman he's moving in and marrying her she has no choice, all while giving him everything before he says he will divorce her and take it all. Of course I'm still trying to believe he just walked into a public place and openly raped repeatedly a woman while threatening another? On top of all of this we are to believe his parents are all ok with him just up and moving out to move in and marry a older woman? Come on dude your just pathetic and trying way to hard to live your pathetic life through a completely bullshit fantasy. I couldn't even finish this chapter it was so stupid.

So, it's me again. I wanted to let you know I'm creating an account and writing a story. It's going to be about the aftermath of your silly story. It'll focus on Alvin, and his journey for revenge. It'll also reveal just how stupid Klay is, and that'll be the reason he has to use force with everything. Turns out klay isn't as big as you've written him, because anyone that big is, more often than not, one of the nicest people you'll meet. I'm not kidding, that's why "gentle giant" is a phrase everyone knows. Anyways, Klay will be smaller and Alvin will run away from home after the divorce. He'll set off on a journey to reinvent himself. He'll learn self defense from the one person that Klay could never beat in the ring (oh yeah, Klay was into MMA and only won because of brute force). Alvin will work out everyday and since he's only 15 in your story he still has a lot of growing to do, and that's exactly what happens. After five years he will come back home where his mom now runs a women's home for abuse victims. Since Klaus only ever had an IQ of 73, his life has only gotten worse. What he took from Alvin and his mom didn't last long because he didn't know what to do with it. Eventually there will be a reunion of sorts, and Klay will try to reinsert himself as the bully that dominated her and Alvin, but when he sees Alvin and how much bigger and faster he's gotten, he starts to get scared. You'll have to wait to find out what happens. But since you're the one that introduced incest, it'll be interesting to see what I can come up with. Fair warning Klay ends up dead, and his family is sued for damages since it can't be collected from Klay. Alvin and his mom never speak again afterwards.

I think I'm going to have fun writing a better story than you. You see, this is what a bully does. A good bully isn't simply tough. The best bullies are smart. I don't know exactly why, I'm going through a lot lately and your story just rubbed me the wrong way. I'll post another comment when I have posted my story. You should take some writing classes. This comment is better written than your whole story and I'm writing from my phone with no spell check. You have some potential, really you do, but you need to learn basic plot construction and grammar.