All Comments on 'My Wife - A Black Gang Toy Ch. 15'

Just sitting here rubbing on my hard Cock would like to be the clean up man for the whole group

BASIC. Too much written from the man's perspective, mechanical. And the woman's perspective could be so much richer and textured. It's like you wrote a visual porno into words, Wrote what you SAW while watching a porno, instead of writing an erotic story from our mind. If you can't write the woman's perspective, find a writing partner who can. You need relevant nuance to write a good story.

I suppose my viewpoint is male oriented because that is where my experience lies. I'll try to inject more feeling and experience into the female side of the story.

They are really good, but, I do think they could be better. Also, whoever proof reads these stories for spelling and grammatical mistakes, is not doing his, or her job properly! And yes, it does make a difference, to get it right!

Your best chapter yet