All Comments on 'Native Maid'

Hope there is more

Great premise and nice start but too fast, too virgins don’t think or move that fast. Keep writing

Good beginning!

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“Keeping an eye out for moose” - authenticity!

Take your time developing the story, 2,000 words is just getting warmed up.

Dialogue is grammatically correct but stiff. That’s not how people talk.

I hope he bangs the landlady!