All Comments on 'Nature Girl Ch. 03'

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c4vetteman94c4vetteman94about 6 years ago
Its not shallow

To not like being lied too. She shouldn't have lied, there would be no reason for a lack of trust. Sister or not.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Shallow Rick

Rick feel like a very shallow character. Marissa should move on. What happened to Nature Girl?

prop69prop69over 6 years ago
Disappointed boring finish

Rick is a SHITHEAD. Too bad she can't DUMP HIM.

NO EXCUSE FOR NOT CALLING HER.

TREATED HER LIKE CRAP

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Perspective

You can't use 1st person perspective and bounce from charter to character as the narrator. Try putting this into third person perspective and it would be easier to read.

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