All Comments on 'Naughty Wife'

Lynn sounds hot I would love to fuck her

It could be a good story...but: "Despite inviting Rob to have a drink after work he had always declined preferring to go home to his wife and children..."...then suddenly Rob became a cheater and they were the persons that make him cheat...Never thinking in his wife and children...Why not make this worker single, divorced or a widower? 1*

How did he know it was throbbing? Ah, willing cuckoldry, holding strangers cocks, doesn't get better than this does it? Not. 1*

great story

I see this is your first story on this site and I suspect it might be your first ever. I’m going to offer a few comments I hope will help. #1 Rob slides his hand… present tense while you mostly stuck with past tense. A small thing, but it’s something you should be aware of. #2 You’re writing 1st person so the 'I' can only know what ‘I’ sees or is told. Of course he can draw conclusions from these things. I think I spotted a few places where ‘I’ knew what Rob and Lynn felt, but now that I skim back I can’t spot it. If I’m wrong, sorry—but it’s still something we have to guards against

Keep writing! Your story is pretty good. I gave it a 4..

cuck shit.