All Comments on 'Nervous Wreck'

For your first story this is good. You expressed her inner feelings well. The plot was what I expected, although the Master taking pictures was different, The no pussy rule was a great idea, and the trail of blow jobs and anal fucking was well described. Waiting untill the end to have her cunt ravaged was well done.

I'm not sure I understand the ending. How did she spent the money so quickly? Why was she so enamored with the pictures? If she ended up with no profit, why would she choose to try the same thing again? I assume the humiliation and enjoyment of being used is the answer. She is truly a sexual machine.

Good story base. Like the "Eyes Wide Shut" meets "50 Shades of Grey" idea.

There are a few grammatical errors though and a few times the scrpit doesn't quite match the storyline.

Would highly recommend some proof reading by others before publishing.

Great start though.. please keep up the work!

Well done with your first story. I liked the idea of the nervous woman and her conflicting feelings came across well. The deep throating was a bit prolonged, maybe more could have been made of her discovery of bisexuality and more teasing of her by the clients, but that’s just me. I liked the frustration of no pussy fuck and the orgasm withheld. I’m not sure I followed the logic of the ending, but hell, well done, it passed my clit-fiddle test. Keep writing! J x

I liked how you wrote it, the story elements only made it better + it covered a lot of my favorite kinks ;) 5 stars.