All Comments on 'Never In My Wildest Ch. 01 - Heather'

Your use of side comments in parentheses made the story difficult to follow. It is much like someone trying to tell you a story while a friend keeps interrupting with his own input. It was a good story but needed to be styled differently.

Really well done, great story. What a way to loose your virginity, especially with someone as hot as Heather. (Just one error, you called her Carson instead of McCann) If this Ch. 01, will Ch. 02 be as good and with someone like Heather?

When his buddies little sis turned 18 and still was hot for him...

Buddy’s 🙄

Damn - what a frenetic nonstop wild ride. I don’t think I could have stayed with that much longer - it was exhausting! And great fun - the cliched roller coaster ride, but that’s exactly how it felt. Heather McCann reminds me of Rachel McAdams in that ‘90s film ‘Mean Girls’ - a psychopathic force of nature - and oh so hot! Wow! What a shot of adrenaline. Thanks!