All Comments on 'New Friends'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Enjoyed

I enjoyed your story! The dvd was a nice surprise I was not expecting.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
great story

Love reading your story. very exciting. I also like your other story " I'm bored". About Cap d'Agde.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Great story,

and a pretty good job of writing it. I have to agree with the earlier comment, however -- "tender hooks" is cute, and your meaning wasn't lost, but what you meant was "tenterhooks." There were a few more: I'm sure you are 'defiant,' but the word you want is 'definite.' And peace and piece sound the same, but I think you meant the other. Anyhow, good job! Let the next one rest a day or so, and then re-read it, or enlist some proofreading help. Also, comma usage -- or, lack thereof -- could use some work. Keep 'em coming. Anon

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
One small correction...

The term is Tenterhooks not Tenderhooks:

Tenterhooks [ˈtentəhuks]

to be uncertain and anxious about what is going to happen He was on tenterhooks about the result of the exam.

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