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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Premise with potential.

Well written.

But sex zooms ahead too fast.

She strips as she walks. Fine, I suppose. But no questioning him whether he likes what he sees? And no real description of her body. And she doesn't ask him what part/s of her body he likes best. And what he'd like to do with/to them.

She doesn't entice him to touch any part/s of her. Her breasts. Her nipples. Her ass. Her pussy.

She doesn't take his clothes off. She doesn't play with his cock while doing it. She doesn't tease his cock and balls once they're out in the open.

Four stars for potential.

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