by bandman1980
While the writing itself (punctuation, sentence structure, etc.) was good, as far as sex or stroke stories go, you suck as a writer. I mean what the dad did to her was something like 6 or 8 sentences, what the daughter did was all of 4 sentences (and this in 2 separate encounters...). No real details. Almost clinical. One of those "what was the point..." (of even writing this unless your goal was to just start to tease your audience then shut it all down...). 2 stars.
Loved this. Especially the part about her and the ex-boyfriend of her mom. Love to hear more.