All Comments on 'New York Nights'

This is your best story yet, less self-conscious than any of the others. The story line is the least contrived yet, but could still be improved. The erotic images are natural and well-written in simple, uncontrived language. If you rewrite First Timer, it could be better than this one; its flow in the first paragraphs before you shift tense is the most enticing yet. As far as the sex is concerned, your cocks are much to much the same size and character, and your descriptions are mechanical--sexy is what it does, not what it is. If you want a big cock, then show what it does to the woman, what she feels it doing to her and her reaction to that. To a woman, the cock is not 8 or 9 inches long--she doesn't have a ruler in bed. (If she does, then it's a different story.) Show us how wonderfully big this cock is in an erotic literary fashion, not cheap porn. Let the reader discover its size from the woman's inner narrative.