All Comments on 'Night Of Lust For A Small Woman'

The effort was there just needs some polishing. Don't be discouraged by the hateful comments some of the others made.

They're probably little, if you know what I mean. Just work on the development and you'll be fine.

A lot of violence - but no sex! Sounds like a story made of multiple fetishes to me.

How I wish they could figure out how to bar the 13 year old writers from their wet dreams on this site. Her praise and desire to be a small child and be Daddy's little girl in front of her son should cement his entry into a bi world.

Dreaming of the 16 inch cock.

Good story, but the dialogue.. wtf.. worst dialogue ever.

The problem with this story is that you have too many fantasies going on all at once. Clearly the main theme seems to be a fascination with a petite mature woman who is at the same time, a child or a baby, being fondled and mauled like a Barbie (or more appropriately, a Betsy-Wetsy) by a hyperactive 3-year old. Next you throw in that the woman has been unfaithful to her husband many times, that she (despite being 50+ years old and her son now 18) still produces breast milk (by the gallon? - now that's medical science at its best), and she and her son are sharing incestuous play that has not yet been consummated. <br><br>

As if that weren't enough, we are then treated to a golden shower! Soon followed by complete breast suckage, then a spanking, then anal play, and then, most graphically so, she squats and craps on the floor in front of her family and four convicts. And just when I think you can't top all of the above, you say Big John the convict has a 16" cock!! OMG - he must spend a fortune having all his pants altered!<br><br>

Your Big John character sounds like Sybil - he's got so many personality changes, from tender talk to yelling, to slapping and biting, to gently nibbling - I think someone is off his meds.

TonySnow is correct: the effort is there. That's where it all comes to a screeching halt. The dialogue, the spelling, the grammar... It is obvious that either English is not your first language or you have been schooled in Detroit. Get an editor. Fast.

Good story so far, Pee & scat ain't really my thing so that kind of spoiled it a bit for me but what really lets it down is the exagerated 16" cock. C'mon son!! That's waaaay over the top and it makes the story unbelievable. I know you have to suspend your disbelief to an extent when reading many works of fiction but you have to strike a balance between fantasy & believability.

very quickily became interesting, sensual, and allowed us, your readers to better participate in your story. Don't take too many things for granted since people are different and, especially for us women, act and react differently to high intensity situations. Your premise is so unusual and exciting that I cannot wait to read the next chapters. It did take some re-reading of some paragraphs when you kept switching between what the convict did to her and her relationship with her son. From what was presumed as a standard family, we quickly learned that she apparently was prone to having sex, or at least being fondled, by her son and his friends,. Yes, she is proud of her body and especially her breasts and they are strong centers of pleasure. I will re-read some of this again before I move on to further chapters so I understand more of her life. The big question is, hubby is totally irrelevant so far. Seems impossible since she is so sensual and beautiful. Slow down and introduce the players more clearly so we understand the interactions that are normal and new......

I wanted to like this story as I like petite women with large men, but this was just ridiculous. A 16" cock? LOL

Two stars

Awesome awesome story best on here

It started okay (in my opinion) but went down fast.

Didnt seem to set a background actions seemed random just rambling.

I think this is the first story that I couldn't bother finishing in my life.

Sorry dude.

Better luck next time.

2 stars...

Why you anonymous racist fucktard! Just stick with anonymously reviewing pornography and keep your educational viewpoint to yourself! What a racist throw away comment!