by Gilmuriel
this was a great story. i would love 2 see more from this author : )
That was fucking hot, liked all the lesbian action.
But i also thought too much was going on at once, and it was confusing. paragraphs would be helpful. and the ending with the girl deciding she was a lesbian was a bit unrealistic. but overall liked the content...sounds like something that happened to me once...the sleepover.
However, the orgy part was confusing. You had too much going on at once, within a single paragraph, even. Your timimg was akward. It didn't seem natural. The dialogue sucked. But damn it was hot.
Premise has been done many times, but never so hotly as this. I want more! And more! (and more…)