All Comments on 'No(I)Sey Neighbor Pt. 02'

Well done. I liked the story approach of focusing on the new relationship versus the usual knock down drag out fight between the finances.

Wait, so Sandy gets to pursue a relationship with her affair partner? Geez. I wish that wasn't the case.

Not sure why the tale needed to continue after the break up with Sandy. All of the tension was gone.

Not a bad follow up, but it lost all emotion on tne first page when tne Slut was confronted and just caved…and then had little remorse.

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The story suffered from not really offering an explanation for why Sandy lost her love for her long time super stud boyfriend. Why take up with Rick when you have”perfect cock” at home? Didn’t make sense.

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And Dee was just too “over the top” eager and bouncy….or something. Maybe she and “perfect cock” will make it….but she needs to buy a clue….he seems to not want to make any real commitments 😎

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4 ****

Great story. Sandy seemed not to broken up about the end of the relationship. I got the impression that she is a wandering slut and not marriage material. Shame that a person has a hard time accepting this condition. On second thought if this kind did then it would thin out the herd for L/W stories and I would be bored.

Did I miss the results of the STD test? Cancelling a wedding is a bigger deal than you have included, family, friends, invitees will want to know, and will find out, why the wedding was cancelled. Seems like that should have been a part of this story.

noisy does not have an 'e' in it... cute attempt at a pun for a title notwithstanding.

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find the problems that any amateur writer should have seen

A good story, but, terrible writing.

any man stupid enough to a believe a woman when she says she loves him, who also spent the last 2 months aiding another woman cheating on him deserves all the misery in the world

Not a bad finish but his lack of any real emotion about the breakup left me feeling a little flat in this chapter. Looking back over the series, we never heard about her family dynamics and how he got along with everyone. How old were they and why was the courtship so long? Added depth would have added to the the reading experience. 4.4*

I think this should have been all rolled up into one longer chapter. most of the drama was in the first chapter, the break up was scene, was the main controversy for the second chapter, and it wasn’t that long, so to me the second chapter felt a little anticlimactic. If it had been one story, to read straight through, it would have read a little better.

Thanks KS

It was okay, but the ending fell flat.

I don't get why he had zero emotions about his fiancée lying to him and cheating for months. I totally understand him falling out of love with her, like flipping a light switch, but where was the anger at her betrayal?

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Then all the coddling as her life fell apart was nauseating. She was suffering well earned consequences for shitting on her fiance. At the bare minimum, he should've encouraged Dee to press charges and file a restraining order. Permanently destroying Sandy's career would've been a nice bit of payback, and the restraining order would've kept her out of his home too.

Just no.

Lousy ending and I expected the lawyer/boyfriend to do something nefarious, after all, he is a lawyer.

This should have been in the Romance category, or maybe Erotic Couplings? There was no marriage, and the engagement was so weak that the intended groom hardly shed a tear. And they were supposedly in love, loyal, committed, For Nine Years? So Sandy just got hit with the Martian Slut Ray? Like she didn't work in that testosterone swamp of snakes and alligators for years, and she just lately decided to start fucking around?

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The romance was very nice, and the sex was adequate. But the whole point of the story was why did Sandy start cheating and fall in love with a guy from an office where she has worked for many years? Was Eaves new to the office? And the eventual agreement for Sandy to just walk away is a major plot fault.

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Sandy was going to give up her share of the house to protect her lover, and under the "promise" that her ex would throw some money her way. Now that their affair is out in the open why would Sandy not go for every penny that she has legal claim to? What do you think her lawyer fuck buddy is going to recommend? The cops already let her go with no felony, so Sandy can pull whatever shit she wants. And with her lawyer lover advising her she's going to try for every penny and every ounce of revenge she can get; Get Real.

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A decent plot idea, but the execution lacked logic and normal human behavior. Why would Sandy ever admit to their mutual friend that she was fucking some guy at the office? Not gonna happen. Better luck with future stories.

I liked it.

The story was humorous, erotic and unusual.

But there were flaws in the plot.

I gave the first half top ratings

but this part 4 out of 5.

Thanks for the story writer.

Loved it! A fun sexy tail/tale.

This is a very entertaining story that you told very well. Really made me laugh a lot!

Seems unfinished, but well written.

Very well written. So — when can we expect the next chapter?

A two part story that could have been way shorter.

Extended sex scene descriptions do little or nothing to move the story along

Only a 3 from me.