by denonwithangelwings
raped---Only a sick mind can think that to be true
You should write about her mutilation too. Her breasts carved out of her or her cunt chewed off and she still get an orgasm. Man, this isn't even bdsm. This is sadistic and sadism doesn't qualify as erotic. Please spare me the 'this is fiction crap.' Fiction my ass'. Ted Bundy started off writing his fantasies too and then turn it into reality but in his sick mind it was still fictions and fantasies. It didn't happen in his world. You, author are heading towards Bundy's world. Good luck to those poor unsuspecting girls out there.
this seemed to me to convey the pure lust and violence of true sex, even husbands and wives have this feeling, its raw
Bret Ellis writes the same raw stuff and I have yet to see his name in the paper. You both should go and read something that will not offend your sensibilities such as Alice in Wonderland. You can do that while rape your mother on Mothers day.
Spell check and proofreading would have improved this greatly. Also, it seemed to go from rape to her enjoying it way too fast. That can be an interesting progression in fantasy, but here it was a strange instant turn about.
As for the people that seem offended by the rape themes, or the implication that women want to be raped: no one is saying that. Can people not read well enough to realize they are in the non-consent section?
Okay, to shut up a few other commenters, I'm female and I liked this quite a bit. It was a bit abrupt at times and moved maybe too fast, though, but the overall theme and intent were quite a turnon.