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Click hereMile shook his head. "I ran into officer Symond Welles at the club last night."
"Whooooaa..." Cerys looked floored.
"As you can see, he knows it was us and he's not happy about it." Cerys paused to consider this piece of information.
"But he let you go -- he respected the neutral zone? Or did people have to interfere?"
"He said he would respect it, but that others might not."
"Shit, I'm sorry, Mile. I shouldn't have pressured you to go." Mile nodded solemnly.
"I am tired of finding myself in situations like that when it's totally avoidable. It's time for me to get serious." Cerys gave a quick nod and looked at Mile for a long moment.
"To answer your question," he finally said, "you are very expressive with your face. If you hear something you don't like, it shows -- yes, like that!" Cerys laughed and pointed to the scowl that crossed Mile's features. "Coupled with your noble upbringing, you really just come off as abrasive and unfriendly. And judge-y." He smiled apologetically at Mile. "Don't get me wrong, you've come a long way since you first joined."
Mile sighed and slumped in his cot. He mentally added "work on establishing poker face" to the list of things he needed to do in order to be successful.
Yes, it was time to get serious.
- COMMENTS
Art0rius8 months agoAuthorAnonymous: thank you, I’m glad you’re enjoying!
Totally agree about adding dated headings; that was actually my intention but I dropped the ball on that, whoops. If it helps, just know that I go back and forth between the present and past every chapter: it goes ch1 present, ch2 past, ch3 present, ch4 past, etc.
I will definitely work on clearing up the confusion and eventually go back to tidy that up in the chapters I already posted.
Oh don’t worry, I’m not taking time off writing! I’m taking time off posting in order to build up some buffer. Also, I don’t like to half-ass things and I have to do a lot of research because I’m writing about things I know nothing about, hah. I’m working on it every day and hoping to have more to post in two weeks at the latest.
Thanks so much for the feedback!
Anonymous8 months agoWonderful has me sucked in. I really enjoy what you have so far, I also am finding the back and forth in time slightly confusing this might be bettered served with a heading denoting the time reference. Definitely not telling you how to writer you story cos I really enjoyed what you have written so far. In your comments you stated you are taking time off writing for a while? Did I get that right, if so how long, sorry I am just invested and impatient. Please keep at it.
Art0rius8 months agoAuthorAnonymous: thanks for the feedback. Great questions, and they will all be answered in time. I definitely started out vague and that’s purely because this was a sexual fantasy in my head before it was a story with a plot, and I’m not even sure about some of what you’ve asked just yet. I do have have a vision for the story, but lots of loose ends to tie up. But I’m stubborn and it’ll be done. Hope you can bear with me while I figure it out! Also, gotta admit, I’m a sucker for a nice slow reveal. :)
Anonymous8 months agoThe two characters are interesting and their relationship is interesting. I am glad you included trigger warnings bc these interactions were rape. I don't know if people into bdam would want the lines blurred between what it means to submit and what it means to be a victim.
That said, I'm finding the back and forth in time to be a tad confusing or maybe it's the fact that despite us going into the past several times we don't have much more info than we did at the start. Did the rebellion really end suddenly? Who knows the whereabouts of the former prince other than those at the generals home? What does he want from him? I'm intrigued enough to continue reading but i how come clarity comes as to where the story is headed. It was clear the king and now his brother and new king aren't favorites. What does that make those who serve them?
Art0rius8 months agoAuthorAnonymous: Thanks, friend! I always enjoy hearing your thoughts. Thanks for reading and commenting!
