Oceans Treasure

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"Oh Randy, that really tasted good. Can I taste more?"

Randy explained that a man can't just keep orgasming like a woman but promised her would be ready again soon.

After having sex again for the second time that evening, they took a walk on the beach and Maria kept crying in happiness.

Four months later they found out Maria was pregnant so they moved from Isabella to Arecibo so they could live in a larger house to raise their baby.

The house was all prepared and a they decided on hiring a nanny to live in the guest house and help raise the baby. They had a baby daughter and named her Mariana after her Maria's mother. Times were great.

Seven years had passed and life was good when tragedy struck. Maria went upstairs to check on Mariana and she was gone. She ran and got Randy and they searched everywhere for her and the nanny, they were nowhere to be found.

Searching the guest house again, they found evidence suggesting the nanny took Mariana away.

The police were called and full-scale investigations went on for months. They were devastated.

They moved back to Isabela to get away from the sadness in the Arecibo house. Randy decided to go to the bar one night and Maria went with him. Everyone hugged with them and shared the pain of losing a child.

When they left to walk home, the old man from the past appeared out of nowhere and said, "She took you at seven and now your daughter at seven. Ursula can be found in her towering gardens along with Amphitrite and your daughter, follow the Star."

When they turned to question to him, he was gone.

"Where are her towering gardens? Follow what star?" Maria screamed. "Please tell us."

Thanks for reading. Part 2 will be coming out soon. All comments are appreciated.

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LifeUserLifeUserover 1 year agoAuthor

If anyone wants to take my story and expand on it, I will be willing to talk about it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

The story actually should be used as a layout for a great epic / novel. I understand its a big ask but you could offer it to others to flesh it out. Waiting for the promised second part.

LifeUserLifeUserabout 2 years agoAuthor

Thanks for the comments Carnel_words. It is a short story so yes, it is a little rushed. I am not really into writing , suck, fuck, cock, and pussy, or like words 20 times in one sex session and just put down crude sex acts. I can do novella's but just don't care to. Being very novice at writing, constructive comments are always welcomed.

Carnal_wordsCarnal_wordsabout 2 years ago

I like this story but it felt too rushed. I couldn't really get into the sex or dramatic scenes because they were over before they got started. The pace was trying to leave me behind and non of the big moments felt big. Hell, I couldn't tell if you're main character was emotional. Even being angry at finding his close ones betraying him did not feel big. This could an awesome mythology-like epic if you put more details and more "living" in between the big moments. Let us know what's going on inside your characters. Make us want them to win. (Sorry if this posted twice, my first bit sent before I was finished) Keep Going!

Carnal_wordsCarnal_wordsabout 2 years ago

This is good but it felt so rushed. I couldn't really appreciate the sex scenes, they were

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