All Comments on 'Of Sinners and Saints Ch. 01'

So far, OK, but your editor needs to read your story more carefully. You had one paragraph of 1st person perspective from Lisa when the rest was all in 3rd person.

So, MissMuse99, editor here, who does not see your perceived one paragraph in the first person after rereading this piece MORE carefully. And if it's there, so what. If that's all you can find wrong with it, I think we've done quite well here. I did see a sentence split off from a paragraph that was probably corrupted from the transmission between my email and attachments to the author. Hope you will agree with me that the content is good & entertaining. The story needs to continue beyond 2 chapters. We're patiently waiting for Lust & Depravity to give us more.