All Comments on 'Mesmerizing!'

The ending ruins it for me.

A better ending would have bee with the sisters only pretending to be hypnotized.

Great ending!

But one thing bothers me greatly. The references to "wanking" and other uniquely British colloquialisms are diametrically opposed to the premise that the three siblings all went to the University of Alabama (Roll Tide). I just found it odd is all I'm saying.

There was a point that was reached during the Protagonist's sexual congress with his sisters that I felt like the author was carrying things too far. It was almost as if you had a checklist of sexual activities that all had to be included regardless of the flow for the story. It totally ceased to be interesting and titillating at that point. 🤔 As an author, you can overdo a scene and destroy your own tale. In my humble opinion, you certainly did that here. It would have probably been better to split it up into the initial threesome followed by two more singular encounters with each sister a day or two later. 3/5

that is funny

You basically moved the story from incest to mind control. Still hot in its way, but different.

Still worth five stars. It might be interesting to see a variant as sp9983 suggested.

Tc

Loved the boomerang ending!

maybe have his new girlfriend have him act on the fantasies with her? ;)

Great story…until the abrupt topic switch which ruined for me an otherwise great idea.