All Comments on 'Ogres and Ogresses Ch. 04'

Just recently found out that you could resubmit edits to your story. The things you don't know. They corrected versions of the first 4 chapters should be out this weekend. (Also with added/revised dialogue, but the plot remains the same!)

-Thx. Ms. Stubborn

You need an editor to help the flow of the story. That aside, this story has great potential. I look forward to the next installment. #savedtofavorites

I like the story, but the formatting needs work, badly. Any time you change speakers, you MUST break to a new paragraph. Lumping conversations between multiple characters into a single paragraph violates a cardinal rule of writing, and is incredibly difficult to read. If not for the formatting, your story would be a truly enjoyable read. An editor likely won't want to fix this for you. But, like I said, I do like the story, so keep writing.

this s getting good. the story is just getting warm and i have a feeling its going to get hot. I cant wait to read the next chapter.

At first I wasn't quite sure what to expect, but this story is getting more and more beautiful while developing... Keep up the good work!