All Comments on 'Oh, Granny Ch. 02 - The Magic of a Massage'

by MrsStallion

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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
no building of momentum

Too fast. Doesn't make a gud exciting read

Sapper257Sapper257over 4 years ago
Don't tell your mother!

Its getting better. Could be a longer build up. We all know how much a massage is a good turn on so Gran enjoyed it and Raj certainly did.

Nice to see a measurement in centimetre's and not exaggerated.

Loved the to sayings "Don't tell your mother" and "Grampa".

Looking forward to chapter 3.

Keep writing, maybe Gran has friends her age who need a bit of extra loving.

REgards

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