by Turbidus
Not a bad tale, a bit long, maybe to much Lingo? Maybe a little to much cussing??,
but NOT A BAD TALE!!!
At some point, in the distance future, I hope to re-visit the story. When I do I will re-read it with your suggestions in mind.
Thanks
It gets really annoying trying to figure out who is the narrator. Stick with one POV. A truly annoying story.