All Comments on 'On the Road Again'

3* for the couple...1* for the cheater...If this story was about the couple and a single man, it would be a good story, even if the dialogues seem sometimes a little childish...But the cheater telling the story ruined it...

Fuck you annony

Nicely done. 4 stars.

Who are you referring to? When you posted, there were no anonymous comments, good or bad. Are you this deranged? Oh, yeah, you are.

I'm starting to wonder if those comments are made by a primitive (or deranged) prototype AI

It seems to fail the Turing test.

Which wasn't particularly erotic or entertaining. But the comments! Wow! People are fired up and this isn't all about the wimpy cuckold husband enjoying sloppy seconds.. And that bear in the woods? He died.

No wonder you have nothing better to do than write cockold lowlife porn. Straight men don't do this with their wives dummy.

Give it up Bonnie. We all know it's you pretending to hide behind anonymous. Kind of stupid to attack anonymous comments as anonymous, isn't it? Your score and opinion, as always is worthless bullshit.

As for the story, it's a read. Didn't find it all that erotic or exciting. Maybe next time.

....unnatural, and it ended abruptly. Not so much a story, as a weakly deployed scene.

I suggest that if you are engaged by your idea, you write a complete story around it. There's a wife at home you completely ignore...and I'd bet good money there's far more to a story with these roots than you were willing to commit to.

Also, when writing dialog, I find it helpful to read it out loud. If it comes off sounding wrong or unnatural, as most of your dialog did, it's because I'm so busy making a point, I'm ignoring how people really interact. If it sounds real, natural and characteristic of typical conversation, then I can rest comfortably that I'm portraying characters instead of agenda.

did you ever wonder what made you an idiot?