by allysynn
Syntax! Punctuation! Oh, there is none. Reading this was as easy as swimming up a waterfall.
Please find yourself an editor. People here need little excuse to skip a story, and dodgy punctuation / grammar / spelling will not help.
I'm sorry but someone who doesn't know the difference between 'there' pertaining to a place and 'their' pertaining to a possession, means I don't read this story. I skipped to comments and realise I'm not the only one. Look for an editor. I have put a couple of stories on here (and suffered the venemous comments from 'people' who don't understand that these are STORIES but I still thought I would put my point to you. Good luck.