All Comments on 'One Last Doner/Boner'

The sheer illiteracy required to add a tag for 'spotanious' instead of spontaneous scared me off from wasting time on this story, despite the brevity.

Content: very good

Typos and careful writing: very bad.

Ater you've finished writing a story (or poem, or essay) set it aside for a week or more, then go back and read it. Readit aloud is even better. Getting some one else to read it aloud is best. You'll catch and kill those awful errors, including slipping from first person to third and then back.

You have potential, but you need much practice and development.

Great story

This was a great story, sexy, graphic and a real turn on. The last thing on my mind while stroking my cock to this story was any spelling or grammatical errors. Don’t let the pedantic critics put you off writing more stories. Keep them coming for those of us who use them to cum.