All Comments on 'Only For One Night Ch. 01'

Loved it! Please continue with their story :)

love it keep it coming

I think it's perfect, no need for an editor on this one. Expertly done, and did I mention HOT? 5 stars

great story

Your story is a little too romance novelish for my taste, but well written nonetheless. The intimate scene was very hot and the introduction was good. You don't really need an editor - the story stands on it's own merit. That is, unless you are seeking different perspective.

5*****!

An interesting opening chapter.

Five.

Really good - a lot of fun. A bit romance novel-ish, but still really really good, and a perfect read for a rainy night.

You may want to get an editor to clean it up technically, but keep the story line!

Much as I love the passion between Thomas and Naomi, I would encourage the lawyer in her to break off her marriage first before she moves on with Thomas, otherwise she will just be following her husband's footsteps to become the cheating spouse.

I cheered for both of them. Their marriages were both dead. Divorce simply buries dead relationships. No one can make their husband love them. Naomi deserves some happiness and Thomas made her happy in a way she'd never been. Life is full of ups and downs, they'll have a bumpy road, but that's what makes the story interesting. Good job!

Well written. Editor? Nah...

Come on don't leave me hanging, i've been checking this every other day to see if there is an update.

which is why romance-erotica is my top favorite genre. I love the romance feel to this story. Don't get me wrong, I love me some sex, but I don't feel like there are enough romance (mixed with sex) stories on this site. Thanks for bringing this, looking forward to wherever you take Thomas and Naomi!

Mel

You did a very good job with this story! My only suggestion is that you use separators, i.e. "***" or "---" when you're shifting POVs. But that is all. Wonderful writing.

I'm still looking, but I find nothing average about you!

I love this beginning.

Naomi should know now that unless her husband can come around; their relationship is over. Divorce is next. Thomas seems to have been harborng a crush on her. He should end whatever he's in, too. Both need to get back to taking care of themselves. If they chose to do so with eachother, so be it.

After an evening like this, we know it won't be the only one.

On to the rest of the evening and the morning after!!

Great job!!!

~Bluegardenia

I loved it from the beginning. Cleverly showing the two sides of this man Thomas. I was in that law office from the moment he and Naomi were in the elevator. Thank you for the details and giving such insight into why he would be so attracted to her. You had me hook, line and sinker with Thomas saying "stay with me tonight". Such romance and eroticisim so perfectly blended. Girl there is nothing average about you! You certainly got an audience here. Don't make us wait too long for Ch 2.

Hope chapter 2 comes along soon. So far as editing goes I'd be happy to help, there are a few things rhs need tidying, not much though.

Dreaded phone auto correct caught me! "that"

You, my dear, have just given a neglected black wife the best orgasm I've had from reading a story in 2010! I've always fantasized about white men and what you've described is exactly the way I dream I'd feel when he fucks me. I sure hope that some of this writing is from personal experience - you deserve a big reward for such skill.

Is an update on the horizon? It'll be a shame not to continue this.

I am in an interracial marriage...and I love reading great stories.....please keep writing....maybe I can send you something that I have written.....

This story is way too good to leacve at one chapter. You have the gift ! Please continue!!!

Good stuff. Can be taken on many levels. A lot was said, but even more implied. I think Naomi's guardian angel exorcised her demons.

Keep writing, AV!

What a gripping story that lead you to ask yourself " I can relate to her anguish and to his strict discipline" . Well written .

The story was hot. It needs a sequal, maybe having the relationship getting stronger than either would ever imagine.

Flawlessly written despite the lack of an editor. I love them and I hope everyone gets what they want in the end.

Wow that was good

What can be said of your written word, SPECTACULAR comes to mind! This story needs a sequel of about 20 chapters, then an epilogue of about 10 chapters, by then maybe, just maybe I will be able to be happy for this non-coupled, couple. They both deserve true love and happiness!

Thank you again for another great story!

KittyOh48

This is the type of story you wish would never end. They would be such a lovely couple; in spite of his misgivings on relationships.

Your skill are fantastic, thank you for sharing.. The chemistry between these two is HOT! Hot! HOT!!!!!

This story is the bomb.com. Love the development and descriptions of the characters. The professional setting is a plus!

Its refreshing to read erotica from a real writer, who can write a story and keep your interest. You kept my interest. I can't wait to read more of your stories.

I love these two together. They seem so perfect for each other.

What a wonderful way to end the day for Naomi. Her (soon-to-be-ex) husband was so horrible to her. I'm glad she & Thomas hooked up. Thomas sounds absolutely delicious btw. :).

CONGRATULATIONS. This story is tightly knit and well narrated. Great read solar. Thanks for sharing.

Reggie this was one of the best narrated stories I've ever put my eyes on. I love your writing and always will. I see you have a pretty impressive following her on Literotica. Well add one more. You have captured the emotional pain and uncertainty of a breakup and intertwined it with a need to be loved. More than a rebound romance because of the existing relationship. How is this going to affect the work relationship? Great writing.

Hugs,

Chuck

This is such a wonderfully written and thought out story it makes me ache for it to be my life. I hurt like they do and long for the connection you write about with a younger woman I work with. But my life isn't a story. If only. You are a very good author. I do believe you have earned the title.

But the sex leaves much to be desired. No reluctance. No slow undressing. No foreplay. No description of how what they were doing felt to him. To her. No description of her naked body. Breasts. Ass. Pussy. No description of what he thought about them. No description about what she thought when she first saw his cock. How did it compare to her husband's? Etc.

Disappointing

I come back to read this story regularly because it’s one of the smoothest with its details and build-up. @author, you write with phenomenal grace, please don’t assume a lot of the people who read your story think it’s “disappointing”. That other comment put a bad aftertaste on a good climax.

What a a pleasure to read a story so well written, so erotic so arousing. I came across this after reading a story full of sex, a story that should have aroused me so much, but like most On lit it was so badly written it did nothing to stir my juices. This on the other hand had almost everything, sadly I agree with anon. about the lack of description, but still the smoothness of the story made it impossible not to give it 5*

Great story, I loved it, very smooth flow. I was almost cumming with them.