by GirlMidnite
Superior writing, sexy characters. Perhaps best of all, they aren't 'stock characters", but complex--people who are neither all good or all bad, which adds greatly to the scenario. Please keep this one going.
Nice to see stock characters in a turned around situation.
Liked the story, but it ended leaving an awful lot of loose ends. It was like the story started in the middle and finished too soon. Keep writing, try to use an editor.
I really enjoyed this, although it makes for uncomfortable reading in places.
My only criticism is that you have over emphasised the various skin colours to start with, but perhaps that is the convention of the genre.