by hentaikitten
Some folks have said it was too short, it needs a sequel, etc, but I'm going to go against that grain and say that I very much appreciated the brevity here.
I thought it was very well done; you managed to make the characters complex, the character arcs were both complete stories, and the pacing was wonderfully fast without feeling rushed. You managed to squeeze a lot of world-building and a lot of personality into the story, without making me feel like I needed to take notes to understand what was happening.
I don't think it needs to be longer because I think you accomplished everything you set out to do with an enviable mix of efficiency and style. A five-star work. Good job, and looking forward to more of your writing!
This story was very interesting, I wish you had kept up with it. It’s hard to find good stories with orcs in it.
Otc strongholds where only the chief can have wives and children? I sense the Elder Scrolls in this. Loved it. I can't wait for more.
I loved how the Elf thought she had to do it ti survive, but in the end she ends up enjoying the sex and is almost grateful not only to be alive but grateful of the whole experience :) (and as I told you I always fantasized about an orc and an elf getting it on)
I agree, I''d love to see more of Amiri and Bargak. Maybe a little of what happened once he brought her home or the other suggestion of Amiri helping the slaves get settled.
Personally I would really like to see this as an on going story. Amiri could help the other captives adjust... she could become pregnant, etc. More please!
Im suprised no one else has commented on this story. It was a little short and lacking in some detail on the sex scene but overall not bad. I would suggest a re-write with a little more depth and detail and definetly add more chapters to the story. Could go really far with this storyline.
I love your story! I play D&D and a lot of fantasy games and orcs are made out to be brutes and savages. It's nice to see a romance between an orc and an elf.