All Comments on 'Our Day Off'

Ten of the worst stories ever written in one freaking day. Where do you clowns crawl out from? Stupid POVs, present tense in two thirds of them, cock cages. Just garbage. No, not even garbage, litter. Just trashing up the site.

It's sweet but I want the whole enchilada. The initial flirting , missed signals perhaps? But the author wanted and accomplished exactly what they wanted. To me , the thrill of arriving at mountain's peak is not to be dismissed but the struggle to climb there is just as integral to what I consider a satisfying story.

The author has skills - that can't be denied. Perhaps the ectasy achieved by fictional narrator is auto-biographical and is hindering a more full-bodied literary effort. If that's the case ...don't change a thing.

10 postings , 1 ok story !!! It maybe time to seek another site ! It CANNOT get worse than this !

How terribly twee. Please don't write in the second person.

Crkcppr, don't let the door hit you on the way out. The site will be better off without you. Can you take a few anons with you?

Thank you ! I was feeling rotten about the garbage posted today ( other than BillandKate) , when I saw you wanting me to leave. That helped !

Knowing that a little failed author , no not author, just a failed wannabe writer, like you wants me to leave gives me the vigor to carry on. Thanks again, it warms the cockles of my heart knowing that you'd miss me. Oh well , think I'll go read a good Huedogg2 BTB special. Tootles !

I do not get it,husband, lover, brother, what

Just a question: who are these two? and then: "I can feel my hot, forbidden semen..."...Forbidden? had he any STD? 1*

You seem to be struggling between 1st and 2nd person. You should try 3rd person for awhile until you get the basics down.

frontlinecaster wants some of the anons to leave this site. WTF, who would you bitch about if they leave? After all they're the therapy you seek daily on this site. It makes you feel good and superior to be able to slash and moan about something. Go soak your head into a tub of salt water, maybe it will help your disposition.

Some of your swinger cuck buddies will be along shortly to give you a hand. You all should take a hike on a short pier.

More like an opening paragraph. Where's the rest of this? Not good. Not good at all.

to offset the asshole of LIT's 1 vote

to offset the old ugly fat lonely fag dear annony's 1 vote This pig reads every one of these stories and then votes 1. I'm offsetting his 1 vote.

That's evident in the scummy stories posted daily in this category. Only the likes of frontlinecaster and bonnietaylor would consider most of the stories posted today as erotic. They don't have any idea what the word "erotic" means. Look it up in the dictionary you idiots,maybe you'll learn something. That is if you can read.

Frontlinecaster maybe it's time for you to seek another site, since this one seems to disturb you, and take that whore bonnietaylor with you.

Sorry but your shit isn't worth reading.

I don't know if all the comments are written by the same person, or if it's just a group of idiots commenting on this. How are your comments helpful in any way to the author? Can YOU do any better? If you have nothing constructive to say, then just go away! Your comments cheapen the site.

Great to get feedback, and good to see so many of you calling for higher standards. For the curious, this is an extract from a much longer work that I wanted to test out on the discerning readers here, hence the somewhat vague context of the story. So apologies for that.

Perhaps it is me but I am not sure what this is actually meant to be about.

Is it in the correct category?

This was just about some boring sex!! Thanks for the read.

No story just some boring sex!!

Instruction manuals are written in 2nd person. Was this supposed to be an instruction manual?

Why not take a couple of suitcases and leave the betrayed husband, story sucked.