All Comments on 'Our House - Our Home'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Felt like the prologue

Nice story, but I never felt like I was following the characters. Normally I would expect to be told their story as a way of introduction before you actually hear from them. The first time you really hear from the characters in this story is when its over. The story either needs to progress from here, or more of it needs to be told with the words and actions of characters.

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