All Comments on 'Our Shared Bathroom Ch. 07'

I love your stories and can hardly wait to read chapter 8. Please keep up the great work.

Lustful and loving.

I like it but there could have been much more told between the ending of the last chapter and this one. It seems like you just jump from the last chapter without anything happening between the two of them at all.

how do you go from Mark and Jen being unable to be without each other to them being married to other people? In the last chapter they couldnt stand seeing the other with someone else and they proclaimed their undying love for one another...now they are married to other people, fairly happy, and Jen is pregnant. I dont get it...u were going along fine with them in love with each other, and all of a sudden their with other people...you could at least have explained what lead to this and why they are so comfortable with it...but instead you just jumped ahead a few years without any explanation. I hope you at least have a chapter to explain it, because i dont really like the way you took it. If they couldnt be without one another and couldnt stand to see the other with someone else, how could they be OK with them getting married to other people? Doesnt make any sense to me...

maybe i'm weird, but to me a character loses his/her esteem in my eye when he/she puts down a supposedly loving spouse

having sex with a sibling, in my weird mind, insofar as these stories/fantasies go, is "okay"; but when they started talking badly of their respective spouses ("I deny him this,,,I deny him that, etc.,etc.: per Jen, "bro, you can take my ass; I would never let my husband do it, but you can do it, if you want,,,"), that's when i, as an "observer", a reader, started I started looking at them and perceiving them badly/negatively, too

when I have no need to be interested in a charater, or a story, because it has turned me off, i quit "caring" about the character/story and so I quit reading it,,,

to me it is "real dilemma" and conflicted conscience in loving more than one person deeply and not willing to let one or the other go, but not letting them know, with the sex being merely a side effect, if you will,,,, THAT'S a "hook" to me (as opposed to a story where sex is ALL there is to it,,, with nothing more than descriptions of some big dick and "juicy" vagina are rubbing each other every other line,,, that's no story; jujst fuckin and you could only do so much and it becomes a used porn DVD [incidently, why authors never describe a vagina as being "the biggest vagina I've ever see or fucked", when every story they emphasize how big the man's dick usually is,,,?]]]

This story of a brother enjoying his pregnant sister was great. Her sucking him off was hot, but his fucking his pregnant sister was perfect. Great sex story.

Just leave it as finished. Chalk it up as one that went sideways. On a constructive thought. Watch your time line. I mean the pregnancy not the years missed. By the time a woman gets a doctors confirmation, which you really need with early home tests before you start telling friends and family shes pregnant add seven months plus a week plus time for arrangements and travel the sex occured past her due date. For pregnancy sex keep between 5 and 7 months maybe begining of eight. That's when shes round sexy glowing. By due date round turns to swollen, sexy turns to impatient and glowing turns to tired. Full penetration with a woman at or past her due date is not easy or healthy. As for anal at that point, with 20 to 35 extra pounds pushing on her insides, she's more likely to pop hemroids then have anal. Just for future referrence.

Well, this story had great potentials ... at least, the sixth chapter showed us that... they were meant to be each other.. they realized that after a fight... but, what's this? the practical problems of incest are understood, but, as u have showed, their love could have overcome it... and now, in this chapter u put all that in the word 'experimentation'... well, very paradoxical... i just don't understand, why they chose not to be with each other and to cheat on their spouses respectively... it just doesn't make sense... if u were out of ideas, u could tell us that, but, seemingly u were afraid of getting them to the real life complications...

u ruined it...

i hoped from the very first that it wasn't just another heartless fantasy bro-sis fuck story.. but, after all these, that is what it has become..

Truly truly dissappointed at the death of a story which could turn out to be a great incest story!!!

I think it was very good till last chapter, then things got out of content with the rest of the story. Me I'm happy they are happy but not the way things should have gone in my opinion,

the ending aint right....they were meant for each other...

This was a really great series, but i do agree that the ending just dosent seem right. It seems to have been heading that they would be together, but instead they wound up with other people. Something just seems very wrong about that.

In stories like this one always wants them to end up together. I guess the truth of the real world makes that a lot harders so i liked how they were able to find peace in the real world and still be able to share each other.

I really liked this story, but I do agree that after all that stuff in chapter 6 where they couldn't stand being apart it doesn't make much since that they would marry their respective boyfriend and girlfriend. To be honest after they started having sex in this last chapter part of me was half way expecting the husband to walk in on them while Mark was berried balls deep in Jen's pussy.

FINALLY! Someone has made a great story whrere the two protagonists dont live hapilly together! Sure its sad but thats what makes this story even better. This story just got better and better since the begining! Pat ur self on the back man...

This story was by far one of the best I've read. It wasn't mindless fucking, you didn't see one sibling taking advantage of the other, you could see this story had meaning. The back-round and build up of the characters and relationship was great. I felt like i was really observing this story from your details. The time-lapses also added to the story progressing forward rather than this being a retelling of it. Consequently, i feel this is where you deter the story and in some aspects, ruin your readers appeal.....Personally i felt as if Chapter 7 wasn't written by you at all, it just seems so out of place. The time-lapse is fine as it can help skip parts of minor influence, but you completely skipped or just plain left out how the two siblings go from consummating their love for one another, to marrying their respective school sweetheart. When i read it i was wondering what happened and why something so important was left out. Beyond that, having Jen look at Mark in lust, and Mark give in to that lust? Neither of them ever exhibited those traits in the past and it just didn't suit them or the story.......I understand the aspect of making the story real and showing that sometimes things can't always be what you want them to be, however, if you took more time, or if you were stuck as for reader insight, you could have obtained a more true to the story resolution. Maybe with enough feedback you will change it, or just leave it as it is. Regardless, i commend you on your work. It truly was a story that had heart.

Well... It started out good... BUT! I guess you haven't had much to compare. That's the only thing I can think of. You really think that after their first sexual contact (Very good job) that they would not be "curious" enough to "TOUCH EACH OTHER'S GENITALS????" He rubs against her cunt and cums, then next day they actually fuck and then next day, or week, get in the shower where he fucks her asshole and neither one has touched the other, no mutual masturbation?

LOOK... this is a great story but you left out way too much.

I got to where he talks to dad and that was so unreal I had to quit. If this was written a while ago... dig it out and don't think of the "total" story... just make every paragraph as complete as you can... then go back over what you wrote yesterday, and last week, and add stuff you forgot.As I said, after the shower scene... they are this close to each other... and they haven't kissed.

Good story but as I said, it needs to be made "REAL"!!!!!

Ralph.

this was just great. u really showed how love and sex r one. this is by far the best stroy ive read. keep up the great work.

I absolutely loved the other chapters in this saga, but I really wish Jen and Mark hadn't married other people. They couldn't live without each other in the previous chapter, and this section just felt really unsatisfying to me. Still well-written, but missing something that the other chapters were...

I'd of given this 100 on the rate this submission chart if not for one thing, as soon as i read he married michelle and she married james i nearly said outline, what a pair of idiot's, if the characters loved each other as much wouldn't it of just been easy to move together to a state/town/city or place miles away from anyone they know and live together like they're married, hell it'd not be that hard or unconvincing, they share the same surname so they can say they're married and no-one would know, plus they could keep in touch with mum n dad as they're cool with it. Personally from the male characters point of view i'd hate the fact that my sister (who'm he's supposed to be madly in love with) was spending her life with another guy, the way you've said they feel about each other, surely that'd make mark feel angry and heart-broken that he let her marry someone else, hell the same for her with michelle. I've read many stories on here were the brother and sister have moved out of state lived together happily had kids etc etc, chapter 1-6 great chatper 7 dissapointingly bad. I liked the angle you gave with the parents in the sense they watched, knew and agreed with it but didn't get involved physically, i hate it when parents make out with their daughter/son's in these stories they are boring and just not a turn on or sexy atall, they're all rubbish but great story turn in keeping them off the young uns and letting them do their thing :) chapter 1-6 10/10, first class every one, chapter 7 2/10 great story bar the conclusion that they didn't really love each other enough to atleast spend 5 minutes entertaining the thought that just because they had an incestoues relationship didn't mean they couldn't be together for the rest of their lives without anyone knowing.

i have read every other chapter and after reading ch.6 i thought theyd stay with each other. this chapter shouldnt end like this because of what had happend in ch6. if i were u i wouldve stopped at ch6 because of the way it ended with them becoming one with each other. next time think before u write another chapter.

After reading the entire story, I'm in love with it. Jen and Mark, beautiful people, beautiful love. I found myself laughing and crying right along with them. I felt as though I was a part of their story. This is truth. Love is all there is, nothing else matters. You are a wonderful author. Thank you so much for your passion and commitment to your story.

chapters 1-6 are absolutely incredible. I loved every bit of them. I loved the fact that this story was about love rather than just sex and siblings indulging. All of the chapters were incredibly well written. The way you described the siblings hesitation to be together in chapter six left me on the edge of my chair and I found myself unable to look away, and when they finally consumated their relationship I truely felt as though I were right there with them. At that point I thought they had decided that they truely loved each other and wanted to be together. But then chapter 7 came along and I couldn't beleve it. I wanted them to stay together and I wants them to be together. As the author you have the ability to end the story the way you want, but I would love you to consider writing an alternate ending so that everyone is satisfied and can choose which ending they wantto feel happened. It would be greatly appreciated.

this is so sad, but this shows the real world, they really are in love and its beautiful. this the most emotional story i have ever read

I THOROUGHLY enjoyed ALL chapters. .THOROUGHLY, I did keep looking to see the parents get more involved and happily read about Mark's experience with his mom. I was HAPPY that both parents were ok with it. As I read the last chapter I kept looking forward to Jen's husband coming in at some point or for Jen and Mark to both let each of their spouses know of their love. None the less, I THOROUGHLY enjoyed YOUR imagination and I THINK you for sharing it.

I'm sorry but I fall into the group that was disappointed with the endig. I also really liked 5.5.

Reading the entire series, I loved it but only from chapters 1-6. You should seriously consider re-writing ch 7 since in ch 6 it was perfectly clear that they would be together forever then I read chapter 7 and suddenly they are married to the people they were dating casually throughout the story. In my opinion...It should have been them moving out to a different state and living together. Truthefully....A very disappointing ending to the series.

I love 1-6. 7 is a mixed bag. I liked how they got married to other people, it felt natural and in a way sweet. I, for some reason, didn't like them having sex though. For some reason it felt a bit rushed, and incomplete. Like you were just trying to finish this story up and move on. I don't mind you moving on but this is well written and thoughtful, we've invested so much emotionally to these characters most probably feel cheated and feel that it cheapens what else happened. That being said I do like 5.5 as well and didn't feel like it detracted from the rest of the story, though I understand why you took it out. Keep up the great work, I am definitely a fan now.

After Ch 6, if you change the whole pattern of their lives you owe it to your readers to explain what happened that changed their plans. And if something happened to cause them to part, why the hell are they committing adultery? This makes no sense without an explanation. Ch. 5.5 was a pointless, stupid segment -- if you were getting paid by the word, or had promised a certain number of pages, I would say you had a block and were writing any kind of trash to get more money or fulfill a requirement. As it is, I don't understand.

Cut it at Ch 5 and it would have been much better. Include Ch 6 if you must; it didn't make much sense, as it seemed to take place before Ch 5. Ch 5.5 was pointless, but keep it if you want to give in to those who need to have some sex with the parents. And Ch 7 just ruins the whole story. It's like the original author quit and they got a copyboy to finish it up.

I loved the whole thing including the ending.

-Joe-

I feel fucking conned, i read chapters 1-3 they was excellent THE PARENTS FINDING OUT NEARLY RUINED IT then it went off the boil with the school soccer trip into fantasy land, then all of a suddern you have MARK NOT WANTING TO BE WITH HER THEN BEING SICK WHEN SHE GETS A BOYFRIEND TO RE-UNITING THEM to skipping forward two years where they are happily married, your a complete conartist-fuckwit story writer, you lead us all into readint this chapter shit and then fuck the story up like an american sit com would do in it's final series....Mark & Jen could of easily moved to a city or state where n-one would of ever EVER known them and pretended to be husband and wife untill they got married for real in a small chapel/casino wedding....YOU SUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you ruined a perfectly good story and give them seperate lovers, nice one MONGO!!! im so pissed off when people do great stories then turn into a retard and change it, it's not real life which means it's ok to give them a happy ending TOGETHER FOREVER like millions do in real life, especially since america is the incest capital of the world, i bet half of texas are shagging there cousins sisters and brothers right now

Surely Ch. 07 does not belong to this story? I really think you have some potential but a couple of the chapters went way off the chart from your story line. Left me feeling confused and cheated after investing time and emotion in your characters. Chapters 1-3 were really good though (Give them a 4-5 and chapter 6 earned a 4).

The first chapters of the story went smoothly, but the last chapter is a waste. We all want Jen and her brother to get married. You know that. Why did you take such a turn it the story? You should seriously reconsider writing the 7th chapter. I strongly feel the last chapter is a waste.

poo on the detractors I thought it was great the ending was what all thinking sibs would do

I liked the first six chapters very much. This one was a little bit dissapointing. Dont get me wrong i enjoyed it, but i would have liked to see Jen and Mark together.

Just finished the whole thing. A wonderful story, well written. I hope there will be more...

i agree with most readers that this chapter ruined the series but it seems that all writers here feel they need to either ruin thier stories or leave the readers hanging with an unfinished story so we can either live with it or find another site and boycot this one

No matter what the others say i think this was an excellent end to the series tho it would have been cool if the kid were his child with his sister.

All throughout the texts, the author prepared us for this ending. People, if you read more than the sex scenes, you would have seen this coming! There was this underlying moral tone of acceptance that while the incestuous relationship was fun / exciting / love, that it was not going to be publicly accepted so the two would have to find other partners to marry. They did. If he wants a chapter 8, then he can deal with the post-marriage issues and if he wants introduce the kids. I was fine with it ending at chapter 1, 2, 6 or 7.

Oh, and about 5.5. Either flesh it out or junk it.

This is about the whole story, not just Ch. 07.

I can understand that in reality, they had to separate, but the whole story was pushing the limits of reality anyway. I couldn't believe that they would be able to share a hotel room during the tournament. Given that level of fantasy, it would not be any more difficult to believe that they could find a reason to tell their friends that they were leaving home for a job, college, or whatever, fake a marriage [if they decided they wanted kids, and only Jen would have to do it; she could even say she had sex and got pregnant by a guy that she would never consider marrying], and start a life together. Instead, you have them split up and marry others, denying their love for each other [yet not being able to forget it], then get together again. The end, "Truly, a child of love.", even makes it sound as if he were the father, not James. It was just wrong; it was the end of another story.

Maybe I'm too much a romantic, or want to live in a fantasy world, but I didn't like it; the story should have ended with Ch. 06. I didn't vote; I didn't want to be dishonest, but I didn't want to ruin your score created by people who liked it. Instead I wrote this [overly long] comment. At least you know why I didn't like it, and I'm not hiding behind "Anonymous".

I also dont think it fair to have them giving a weaker love to their husband/wife and we know its weeker because when they first had sex with their futer spouses they felt like it was a betraelal but not when they made love while she was pregnant with anoters child. I also dont like cheaters, but thats just my preferance. (but I admit open relationships arent cheating)

great story, but make more chapters like, what happens to them, is this the end to their relationship, start a story adding to this one by making it two children born from Jen and they fall in love and Jen tells them who she loved/loves and add the kids to the plot. It would make it a lot more interesting.

i liked all the other ones 1 thru 6 but 7 seemed like it was less how should i say uhm less love it seemed like this never happend before and it was just this time only, im sorry.

can u plz add more i loved this 5 stars i love it!!!!!!!!

Up to 6 was good then it just had a horrible turn. Becomes boring when him and his sister are no longer togeher...

i think this series of chapters has turned out well, as you said it's not just the sex but the love.. it's awesome and makes me wet at the same time :P

good job!

a total waste of time this chapter just proves that they never really loved each other if they did they never would have married other people they would have found a way to stay together like most other readers have said we were conned and cheated by a dishonest and spiteful writer real bad form on your part we come to the incest site to read loving happy storie not stories about cheating and the like i agree chapter 7 should be rewritten

When will writers learn that!

That was terrific!! Had a realistic ending too, and luckily for them Jen's husband didn't walk in during 0.0 But yes, very, very good. I think the story went much better adding this chapter after number six. Although chapter six was by far my favorite, this was a nearly perfect ending!! (Ends are never perfect, because they end)

5:5 10/10 A home run!! GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAALLLLLL!!!!

*Calms down* Uh sorry. It was wonderful, and thank you for posting this. If there is going to be any additions/sequels please don't hesitate to pm me about them!

~Storyreader16

This is probably the best story I have read here . I enjoyed the whole thing , every chapter and I read this story chapter by chapter from beginning to end I thought it was excellent I am now going to your bio to see what else you have written PLEASE write more ;-)

I think to many people believe in happy endings. Your all forgetting one important fact, Mark is a horny bastard. I think he can live without sex from Jen as long as long as he's getting some sex. When they have sex in chapter 6 i think its more to finish rather than them not being able to live without each other. I mean its like spending an hour on a puzzle and not putting the last piece in. (HIS DICK!!!) Now that they lived that fantasy they can move into reality. Yes i think they love each other, but i also think they are excited about the fact they're siblings and a girl is touching his pee pee. Maybe Jens turned on by the taboo nature of their relationship, just like the people reading this are. In the story she calls him brother a lot, most people would avoid the word because it brings the truth to light. I think Jen is turned on buy the dirty hot sex she has with her brother and her pooper is his special place!!! I doubt she even sees them having sex as cheating. I also think calling it experiments was a nice touch, cause that's what you call it when you and your sister used to fuck. Good ole experiments. All in all I think it was a great story INCLUDING chapter7. jus my opinion...

This is a great story full of sex, drama, intrigue, and the realities of life. Yes, he is horny and loves sex but so does she (don't you just love that about them). But, more importantly they kept their relationship in check with the realities of life. Them marring would have been extremely difficult and put tremendous pressures on their relationship. The recognized that in life one usually can't have your "cake and eat it too" so they simply decided to simply "eat of the cake" occasionally. I think a great middle-ground. While still maintaining a strong sister-brother relationship.

Love to read more of your stories.

seriously this story was horrible thats all i can say i liked your other series but this was just pure fluff and sex and i agree with the other reviewers mark is a horny bastard and jen a perfect slut there was no true sibling connection in this atleast now we have a story in which we can say both parties were slutty whores....

this series has been by far the best I've read on Literotica. and I've read more than a thousand stories on here. you have the potential to be not just a literotica author, but a book writer. I look forward to more stories.

I read the whole series, and i loved them. And this is coming from a horny 16 year old. Wish i had a sister like her:-)))) haha

One of the best series out of many, i give you a 15 out of 10. keep up the good work!

I really enjoyed this story!

Amazing. Don't you dare stop writing.

how do you go from the end of chapter six to this it seems you left out a few chapters you must be getting senile and forgetful. would have been better if you never posted this chapter or any of your stories. this story demands a proper ending not the garbage you have here. DO IT RIGHT OR DON'T DO IT AT ALL SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND SOME RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND DO IT RIGHT AND PROPERLY.

DBRS

Okay I loved ever Chapter besides 7 bcuz it didnt go with what was happening between the siblings. But besides that I loved them!!!

ch 7 blah could of been better. skipped like 3 years was kind of hoping they would of stayed together some how but guess things don't always have a perfect ending but o well despite ch 5.5 and ch 7 all in all it was good

I found this story again after loving the entire series 2 years ago. And I still have the same opinion on ch. 07. Honestly? To keep this as a part of the story where it's more than clear they would be together for the rest of their lives. To me, that was a terrible decision. I'll just pretend 07 isn't the awful ending to a great story.

loved all this story except ch 7,,,so i will delete it from my mind,,,,'cause according to the story line,,these two lovers shared an intimacy and love and connection most people never find,,,,so cannot believe they would not be spending their lives closer together,,maybe married to others, but still connecting intimately very often.

how can u do this?i loved the whole story.except ch.07.its like a different story.

I was supposed to be working.....professionally speaking, I mean....Your series is astounding and I read each chapter....with renewed vigor, anticipation and interest. Chapter 7 in a downer, sorry, is spoils the wetness that one can get with the other chapter. It spoils the intimacy by introducing two new people who had nothing to do with the heroes of the basic thread.

I was fully ready to give this series a 5 star rating. Then unfortunately I read your ending and can no longer bring myself to give such a rating. Like many have said a love like you described would not break no matter what stigmas were attached to the love. I'm not trying to trash your work but you have actually done a disservice to your characters love by ending this the way you have chosen to

After reading chapter 6, i thought it was going to work. Sure the reason Mark gave had something to it but then how do you explain those fortunate enough to marry their childhood friends. Somehow i feel cheated.

I am just going to treat chapter 7 as an alternative ending.

Anyway thanks for the story. Good work.

I've read the whole story and it was exhilerating and superb.Well done.

I hope others get to read it.

Loved it, until now. Ch. 7 is all wrong. Please please please continue the story from ch. 6!

Your series was very good, but this chapter doesn't belong. From what he said in Chapter 6, I had hope for him and his sister to make their relationship work and happy ending, but this doesn't fit. Seems to much like a different story, especially after their love and gut-wrenching pain when they were apart, and now they decide to be apart forever? Great series, but you should redo the ending, and it seems a majority here would agree.

Plzzzzzz rite more chapters I wanna read a ch.8 even a 9 continue please it the best

Your series was very good, but this chapter doesn't belong. From what he said in Chapter 6, I had hope for him and his sister to make their relationship work and happy ending, but this doesn't fit. Seems to much like a different story, especially after their love and gut-wrenching pain when they were apart, and now they decide to be apart forever? Great series, but you should redo the ending, and it seems a majority here would agree.

all you proved with this chapter is that they never loved or cared for each other they just used each other. typical of the low class of writers here this series should have been in the nonerotic area because it sure killed all feelings of love

I was thinking when I started reading 7 that maybe the two of them did have spouses, but it didn't stop them from having affairs. Or they might have met someone to share even if it didn't lead to bi-sexual play (thought that would be hard to believe too). Either way, like many I love ch 1-6, didn't hate 7, but it just didn't fit the story I had been reading. Consider writing more. Don't just let reactions to 7 change your style.

you ruined it all jen should marry mark ..... not the james or whatever his name is ......that would be better

You ruined the story with ch. 7 Mark and jen should have ended up together. you should redo ch.7 otherwise it was a good story until ch.7

Just go on with it. Now that you've got new spouses in the picture, get them involved in the sex games along with Mom and Dad.

I can't believe the same man who wrote chapters 1-6 so nicely could fuck this stories up with such a horrible ending. I'm genuinely pissed. This is my first ever comment on this website because this made me so mad. Jen and mark should have married. You are a screw-up...

I loved it all. Up until this last chapter. You just messed it up completely

I seriously want to cry because of the damage done to this story. Please write it over . It beautiful up until 7 so please do it again and everyone will love it

this story was going so well and then it jumped the shark the rating it got was cause of the series not the content of this story. this one needs to fill in some gaps for people to be able to know what happened to change her mind cause she wanted to be with him as husband and wife they did that next thing you know they are both married to the people they were dating and not thinking of when they got together

Ok I will say yes 1-6 are great, wonderful, and beautifully well written. The 7th though, well it was not what we where expecting. It was how ever an ending that was well written for the characters of the story. Yes, it was sad, disappointing, and not what we are use to in these stories but it was still yes sad for them because they do love each other so, but are now not able to be, they are on separate paths of life with the memories of one and another. In the end they had each other, but got what they wanted in they end of the begging and know that they will always have each other in their harts. Well done and I applause you. Please don't stop writing.

I can honestly say I'm satisfied with the ending of this story. You played it out quite well 1-6, then finished with a realists' flair at the end. Bravo

That's change was so sudden and with no explanation. Chapter 6 ended with them acknowledgine each other's love and wanted to be together then suddenly they are married to someone else with no explanation and then they started their adultery without any respect to their spouse.

I thought you want to write realistic stories and I dont think this is it. It's such a shame as you have some really really amazing chapters. The story as a whole was uneven and unbalance. Such a shame, it could have been one of the master piece.

Biggest load of rubbish I have ever read dont write any more

It WAS a good story. The writer should have posted chapter six or chapter seven, but not both. Had s/he done that it would still be a good story.

Then there is the character who was applauding a sad story. I doubt there are many happy people spending their time reading online erotica. I suspect that many of us are looking for something to be happy about even if it is only from someone else's imagination. Oh, then there are the S&M people, they're only happy when someone or several someones are being abused.

-- srgeek --

I really like the back and forth tease and pull back that leads to sex that is just incredible and new to both.However,chapter 6 tends toward them figuring out how to make it work,to being married to other people.It might have made for a more plausible ending if there had been a transitional chapter 6&1/2.Besides,two people so in love their souls are intertwined,dont run off and marry someone else.One last question,is her baby his ?

U shud hav posted either the sixth 1 or the seventh 1..... Both dont mesh together with the story... anyways itz ur story... so i cant really comment on it....

I followed the entire story, loved all the emotion that was built up, and at the end of Ch. 6, was satisfied. But the first paragraph of this story brought tears to my eyes. It seemed like such a shame. This feels like it went from a story of true, passionate love to another gimmicky preggo-incest story.

Well done on a great storyline, but the ending to this series was disheartening.

have have her something happen so they are back to gether mark has to come get her from her abusive husband she stays with them fall back to gether her preg with his child this time and they get to geter f good

It must be a dream! It cannot be really happening, after they have become "one", that they would go in separate ways. No sense!

You had one of the best, if not THE best, bro/sis story going. Fix the ending. Make it flow, just to the complete setup that you built in 6-1/2 chapters, before the FINAL ending.

Arise!

Like many other readers, I was led to believe that they were going to get married. And from what I got from the description, I thought it was their baby. Although this chapter doesn't fit among the others, your writing is still some of the best I've seen on this site. I usually don't care about the characters when I go on this site, but you created them in such a way that I actually believe in them. If you could do most of us a favor by providing us the Disney-styled ending, that would be great.

NOW THAT YOU WRECKED A GREAT STORY INSTEAD OF A SKY FULL OF STARS I WILL ONLY GIVE YOU MAYBE 3 STARS,,,,NOW IF YOU LEFT MICHELLE AND JAMES OUT OF THE PICTURE IT WOULD HAVE BEEN A GREAT STORY JUST THINK ABOUT FOR A MINITE AS TO WHAT YOU HAVE DONE,,YOU KILL A GREAT ENDING AND I HAVE BEEN READING PAGES AFTER PAGES OF STORYS AND YOU DISTROYED A BROTHER/SISTER STORY,,,,,,,,THANKS ALOT..............

CODE...........................................................................''R''...................................

What is the matter with all of you?

you could not handle a change up?

get your feelings hurt because it didn't turn out the way you wanted it to?

didn't see it comming did you?

To the author:

You did just fine!

ED

Very enjoyable congrats

That was fucking amazing

If you read the discription then you would realize it said he VISITS pregnant sister

Damn good series very well done

I have to laugh at all the comments.

To me, this ending seems more realistic. How many siblings have some incestuous experimentation, then move on to healthy relations with other people? I'd guess most.

The realities of an extended committed incestuous relationship are extremely difficult. You basically have to start all over again somewhere else because your whole network of friends and family are gone. That's a tough row to hoe. And if there is any friction in that relationship, who do you talk to about it?

Bartok, I hope you come back and finish your other series. Don't let the haters get you down. Instead of enjoying the story and expanding their horizons, they're trying to force the authors to fulfill their fanasies.

To all the haters; You don't like it? Write a better one. Go on, I dare ya.

Good job. I think they both knew they couldn't really keep it going. They gave themselves one final night, but at the end? I'm just not into preggo erotica.

beautiful story - except the ending - they should have married