All Comments on 'Our Story - Allie Ch. 01'

Nice start

I gave you a five for your descriptiveness. "I turned on the shower and took care of the basic things first. I shaved my legs, and underarms, and trimmed up my little patch of black hair between my thighs. I knew some girls that would shave it all off, but for some reason I liked the little bit left, I don't know why. I still do." You leave it there because it is beautiful there and it makes your story work and seem realistic. Moreover, it's there because ladies with chaffed razor burnt skin, stubble growing from pimples, infected and ingrown hairs that produce boils; is just plain dammed sickening.

I like where this story is hopefully going. Oh, yea, grow that pussy mound out to a sexy full bush for your brother to completely bury his face in in a few months.

Hot beginning. Looking forward to the next part.

Just as hot as his view....can't wait to read the next one.

Well obviously they hook up but don't stay together and apparently Matt won in the end. Just another sad ending where they don't end up together.

This is a copy of someone else's story.

Personally, if I were Will, I'd have beat Matt within an inch of his life for breaking his promise. It didn't matter why. And I'd never be talking to Allie ever again. Maybe never see her again because of that BS. Which mena sthis story never would've happened. It's a rather stupid premise to begin with. 1*

Don't even bother writing a follow-up. We already know what's going to happen. eventually they get around to screwing and tell each other how much they love each other but Matt still gets Allie (they have two kids), so her brother is just shit out of lucky playing the side guy. They probably say something like "we knew we would never be able to be together like we wanted to be, so we decided to see other people but continued to fuck off and on when we could" NO happy ending. As a matter of fact, endings like that suck because if they really loved each other they would have found a way to be together with each other the way it was meant to be.

Trust the process, or move along. Thanks for the feedback

Can't wait to see where they go from here.

A copy of someone else’s story? This is derived from a role play that Will and I started and decided we wanted to write/publish. And never talk to your own sister because she gave another man head?? You sound like you are real fun at parties. Thanks for the feedback <3

To the two anonymous commenters saying Matt wins in the end and that Matt gets Allie, they have two kids - did you read the story? Her husband’s name is Mark, that’s who she has the two kids with. Jeeze. Great story, love how it’s from your perspective, Allie, and how we also got Will’s from

His perspective. Ignore the naysayers and keep it up! I can see how this will have a happy ending for all involved. Outward appearances kept up, but still fucking each other on the side? Hot.