All Comments on 'Out on the Farm'

I would like to see a longer version of this story. It's obvious that love sparked the sex. Maybe add a few paragraphs of her leaving a buttons undone to catch his attention or going braless. You could even add in a her using toys at night calling out his name.

Wow. Four garbage stories in one day. I'll bet you're proud.

Not a bad start to your writing career, but I agree with the anonymous commenter about it being an outline. It could be, uh, fleshed out a little bit. As for the grammar and in mis-use of some words, you might consider asking one of the more experienced writers to edit your work. Just a thought. Good luck.

I enjoyed your story. I agree that it would be better if it were more detailed. Getting an editor might be something to consider. They’re free on Literotica. Ignore the rude remarks. Listen to the constructive ones. I almost quit after the trolls beat me to death on my first stories.