All Comments on 'Over the Edge with a Third'

I'm not an erotica virgin anymore

Good first effort. I want to read more about these three.

Four stars on the natural, plus one for breaking your cherry...

The first person and the present tense give your story a real edge of excitement and erotic passion. The relationship between the couple works well with all the back story and emotion for the reader to piece together just from a few clues and glances between. The deal they have seems real. Without dialogue it al feels like a steamy dream and I think you ended where you should. There are some typos of course and the section with the wine glass could have been a bit clearer perhaps. Altogether though I was swept along and caught up into the hot excitement. Thank you x