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Click hereWhat else... Oh! Yes, Laila's armor/sword 'baptism' is actually going to be a scene that will happen.
And finally, I'm not gonna lie. I am shocked, shocked, I say, that there is someone reading this story who enjoyed "Learn Your Place". I only know of one other person who enjoyed both of those stories, so I tip my hat to you basicbrat, you are cool in my book lol. For those unaware, LYP is an arguably darker story of mine than Corrupted Desire, since it doesn't have the supernatural aspect. It's just a normal woman being broken down mentally into a dog. In retrospect, she could apparently make a lot of money. I probably shouldn't give Him ideas... That story's fucked up enough as it is...
Anyway, I believe that is all! I shall bid all of you fans and perverts alike, adieu! And I shall see you in the next chapter!
- COMMENTS
Jackspeed2uover 1 year agoAnd that’s the end of that. A year and a half with no more chapters and a story that has gone nowhere and managed to do it with no direction or goals.
Anonymousover 1 year agoOh for the love of everything holy....please post another chapter!!!!!!! The wait is killing me....
Sorchakover 1 year agoAh, okay. That happens sometimes. At least you were consistent about it being spelled Norah throughout the whole chapter. One story I read, the author spelled a main character's name 3 ways in 3 consecutive *paragraphs*. And when I commented on it, he basically told me to mind my own business; and if I didn't like it, not to read his stuff. I haven't been back since...
marx810over 1 year agoAuthorIt should be Nora. And I thought I found all of those but yeah, that was just an oversight, not me deciding to change her name spelling.
Sorchakover 1 year agoWondering why Nora went to Norah? Spelling changes to names always annoy the s**t out of me. Mangas (or maybe I should say the translators) do it FAR too often.
daves_not_hereover 1 year agoI just discovered this series yesterday. I didn't want to stop reading, but real life does interfere sometimes <grin>.
I voted 5 stars for every part. I hope you're still planning on continuing the story!
Thanks
basicbrat181almost 3 years agoStill not over bring mentioned in the author’s note :P I do hope Teris day is in the list of stuff to write she truly does deserve it. I always love rereading your stories because as you’ve said you notice all the little seeds you plant along the way and it just shows how amazing of a writer you are
Comefindmealmost 3 years agoSo I'll admit, I enjoyed this a lot more than I intended, when I first started this I thought oh, it's just typical sadist/maso stroke story with a cool plot that is t really explored, fun but empty. I was wrong, I'm glad the second story explored the characters more, it added more depth and intimacy, it wasn't just all hate fucking all the time (while all the sex is just hate fucking it was nice you added Intimate moments between). I'll admit, I had hoped for more casual sexual encounters between the four to add a layer to their relatioships, you can't always get what you want.
There's a couple places where Matt's a little cringe, i.e he's perfectly okay shooting cum on a chicks soul, but the word master/daddy makes him uncomfortable.
I was a little disappointed at the end of this that Nora faced literally no consequences from what felt like a pretty big betrayal by omission, definitely feels like Matt is inconsistent in his displeasure.
At the end of the day, this is probably one of the best heaven/hell/mythology stories I've ever read, there's fun moments, sensual moments, tense moments and action packed moments, I love that you use modern sayings and the dialogue flows naturally, when Matt said "bring it in" and hugged the goddess I laughed out loud, it was precious. Looking forward to more!
Medic975about 3 years agoFantastic. Happy to hear about the upcoming baptism, there something just delicious about the corruption of innocence there. I liked LYP as well. I have to say OF is my favorite of your works, it's lighter than the others and hope it stays that way. Not sunshine and rainbows, but CD and LYP are dark, enjoyable, but it's a nice contrast.
marx810about 3 years agoAuthorLol trust me, you are absolutely fine. If something seems off to you, never feel bad about letting me know. It might be something I'll explain later or it might actually be a mistake that I made. It isn't always easy keeping the continuity on point.
There has been the occasional slip up I've seen in rereading things. Some of which I can retroactively explain away and some I just have to hope you don't notice lol. But don't worry, it in no way puts me off of writing. If anything it makes me question if I got across what I meant to. Sometimes I'll agree and sometimes I won't, but it's never a big problem or anything.
Suppose I'll also reply to Grandmaster Crow while I'm at it lol. I... wouldn't phrase it as falling in line with someone else's script. I can see how it looks that way from a point of view but it's more that he's worried that Matt's impulsive acts in fighting the system are actually leading towards the apocalypse, which Bob does hint at. Matt is just... taking a pause to access the damage. Which... ya know... Epilogue and all... might not be a bad decision lol.
