by xelliebabex
Not sure I can wait a month to find out what happens maybe you won't make us wait that long????, thanks for sharing I love this story.
What a good chapter, lots of juicy plot and action. I was sad at the end:( and it was shocking! Great read as usual Ellie (a few typos you may want to sort as made reading a bit hard in places) and very gripping. I hadn't made the Vince/Son connection.....you rock! Ta. M.
Chapter 10 has already been submitted and should be up in 3-4 days, I hope.
Thank you all so much for your comments, you guys are awesome!
Can't wait for the next chapter, really don't want it to end though! I feel that I have been reading this for so long now I will really miss it. If Rob doesn't find anyone at the end can't you write his story? Maybe under romance with a BDSM twist, pretty pleeeeeaaase? Also sorry for nagging but would love another instalment of Twelve Tables! M. x
I love your nagging mayness:) I always have. (Not that you actually nag) I need to complete s few things for the survivor contest but now that this series of Bella is wrapped up I should be able to start on completing my open series. I have spring break at the end of September i am hoping to get some decent writing done then.Like a little spring clean of my stories lol.
love this story. you rock as usual. this chapter was awesome. so sad at the end. can't wait for more.
This story could not have been written by you because the writing and editing are terrible. I hope it was just a file mix up but there are a couple of paragraphs so poorly written that I have no idea what you were trying to convey.
Wow, anon. That is some extreme jerkiness. Also, I don't know what you're talking about? I noticed a few typos, but nothing egregious and certainly nothing so terrible as to obscure elliebabe's meaning.
Another great chapter, elliebabe! Keep up the intrigue and hot sex!
Ps-- please give us some more calliope soon? She and paddy are so hot and adorable together. I wanna see what's next for their relationship!
Another great chapter with so many twists and turns. Totally unexpected....love it! I didn't expect the Vince/son twist. While I at times struggled with Bella not having her voice....I loved that Vince's rant didn't unsettle her - she was comfortable in her own skin. Nice to see
I can't wait for chapter 10. So much happened I this chapter that I don't think I could have handled a long delay
Thanks!
wow elliebabe what a great twist cant wait to read the next shame its going to end will miss reading more about bella and mel once its finished!
So many She's instead of He's and words simply missed out that one whole paragraph made no sense whatever !!
I tried.. I really did... but the combination of painfully daft protagonists, bad grammar and punctuation, and entire paragraphs copied and pasted from previous chapters made me throw my hands up in frustration.
You definitely have a good imagination and loads of potential, but I suggest you keep working to hone your craft.
Also, perhaps a smidge more research: there are no cars in Venice.
This is the second time I’ve read this series. It’s still so sad! I know the story’s not about real people. The first time I read this chapter, I had tears running down my face. It’s all due to your great writing. I can visualize the characters so well. Keep up the good work!
Loved the story the news of Mel's demise was no surprise as I felt it had been signposted for practically the whole of the chapter, but never mind it was good,I did wonder if Mel was going to give Bella over to some asian men for further training while they were in KL that could have been interesting, but never mind we left Bella grief stricken in hospital I will be interested to see where this takes us.