All Comments on 'Parties Bore Her'

I hope you can continue

The two most off-putting narrative devices are second-person ("you") story-telling and use of the present tense. All four of your stories use one or other of these (although you seem unable to keep consistently to the present tense). This is pretentious and annoying writing. Try writing in first ("I") or third ("he/she") person and past tense and you might become a half-decent story-teller.

Yawnnnnn

Good story, but stick to one tense. You confused me a little.