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by Verhaalen

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AnonymousAnonymous5 months ago

The end was so hurried. You spent thousands of words on intro and then when it came time to have "the moment", you kinda...well...ended much like Ellis did the first time....too quick and kinda flacid.

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A short story writer in various genres. Of Dutch birth but living in the UK for many years. I appreciate comments but do not respond to them, sorry.