by taylorsam
Better that instead of following on with the same couples the couples changed but not well connected to your book club theme
Sounds like a great time was had by all! Another well thought out and written chapter. I look forward to reading more of your work. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.
hot story, very nicely told, hot to see a wf wanting to play. Onlymegative comment is that I was hopping the fun would end on a 4some. enjoyed it, thanks
Would be more fun to read if edited by someone who knows how to keep the tense the same throughout, spell "clothes" instead of "cloths", etc.
Good story but mixing first person active tense with past tense each paragraph and in some sentences is confusing and makes reading smoothly very difficult. Suggest using one or the other but not both at the same time.
My first wife and I played with good friends a few times. We went the way of this story with the first couple. Probably because it was our first time. It went a little faster than this one did but progressed in baby steps. The second couple that we'd been friends with for awhile we just kind of fell into it one evening. We started out in the living room and then my wife and the guy ended up in the bedroom. Me and his wife stayed on the daybed and I'll never forget that the Ali/Spinks rematch was on TV.
Well thought out and written with taste! Wonder what you're home life is like girl! LOL!!
Good from beginning to end.
This story seems pretty plausible and is quite hot.
My wife and I verbally explored doing this with couple friends and, in the abstract, it was pretty hot. In reality, if I found the wife to be appealing, my wife couldn't stand the thought of sex with her husband. If my wife found the guy hot, I couldn't stand his wife. Sometimes, even if I found the wife hot and my wife felt the same about her husband, there was something about the husband that made me queasy about him doing my wife. Sometimes, my wife felt the same way about the other woman.
There were just too many combinations that had to line up and, in the end it remained just talk. That probably was for gthe best anyway.
Better than the first chapter. I was believing that this adventure really happened. Maximum turn on.
Mixing tenses in the same sentence makes for difficult reading. Good writing over all.
Great story, similar to my life 30 years ago. How bout another ch. same room, girl on girl.
At least realistic seeming, since we've never done that. I like that the second chapter is more than one page, one can enjoy the journey.
Just the right mixture of reluctance and seduction, and none of the usual cuck stuff and 12" cocks b.s.
More normal, real life stories would be awesome!
who are these people that go to this site, find a topic they like, find a story they like, read it and then complain about the content. I am sure many swingers can relate to this story from their own experiences.
You make it sound like so much fun. Why not add in some drugs? Just more fun, right?
This should be in the fantasy section.
A classic on How to Get Started in Couples Mate Sharing. I can attest the tactics in this story are very commonly used not only with two new couples fumbling around like kids in the back seat just getting started, but also when an experienced couple is seducing a new inexperienced couple. Surprising how well it works,
I'd like to try that pathway with my GF. She is becoming a little more used to the idea of swapping, we kid about it, been to a couple swinger dance parties, but still hesitant. Like Stacey, it'll be a while before we even get that that far - but the adventure and excitement of progressing inch by inch will be great fun!
I loved the slow, steady pace. Even if it is fiction, it mirrors real life. As the male half of a "swinger" couple, I assure you that it's very realistic, too! And to "Anon" earlier, sharing yourself and your spouse doesn't always screw up a marriage! There are a LOT of Lifestyle folks with much stronger marriages than most vanilla couples we know! As long as there is honesty among all parties, it rocks!
I agree, though, that the story could have been helped with some basic editing for typos, punctuation, etc. But - frankly - if the editing slows the next chapter ... don't bother! Just bring it to us!
... and everything to do with this story.
This is so close to my own experience, and brought that crashing back into my erotic mind as though it was 5 minutes ago.
Well done. Great story, nicely paced.
This can keep growing beautifully, but now with the intricacies and eroticism of what they really think and say and do.
Thanks a million for this story
I loved it. Just wish the anonymous ignoramuses would get off of fine author's backs They should just appreciate the work that goes into a story and enjoy it for the entertainment that it was meant to be. I know that there are some really good anonymous critics and it isn't you that I'm calling ignorant. Some of you give really good critique and it is appreciated. Taylorsam, you wrote one hell of a story so far, and I hope to read more from you.
Story had a great pace and a realistic sequence. It seemed very believable. It had us excited the whole time. Please write more stories.
... in the wrong category. For those whiners that say it is just a porno story, then why are you reading LW stories? Porno is in group sex and erotic stories. The hope is that LW stories have a plot and intrigue, and maybe hot scenes.
With lines like '... what we were planning was just "fucking";. It's just physical not emotional', well where does the loving wife fit in? Emotionless fucking just to fill a hole with multiple couples belongs to Group Sex, which I avoid. Put it in LW and get criticized one way or another. Nothing to do with realism, just looking to avoid wasting time.
BTW, I skimmed this story. CTRL-END, last page, 1*
- Just another anon - just like all the others, even those with monikers.
Good build up. I'd like to see a continuation, particularly now that Stacy has let her hair down. What else could happen?
These are stories that are meant as fantasy. What is with the asshole who talks about realism. If he wants realism let him read a history book and get off this website...............Good writing, keep up the good work
This is just good fun pornographic 5 star fiction, not a recommendation for family activities. It's fiction folks!
Accordingd to the dictionary pornography is material that appeals to the reader's prurient interest. So sit back and let this story appeal to yours and should it lead to masturbation or something even more enjoyable...well, so be it.
Nice development, if a little predictable. What comes next for these couples?
Great way to fuck up a marriage, no 4 people can just say this is just sex, what I do in my marriage is make love, you can't change human nature, what you can do is ruin a couple of marriages, there is no honesty in this story.
A nice primer of coordinated progress to a point at least one couple has discussed and are curious about! A lot of communication, most of it between two people at a time or place. Hubby1 with Sweetie1, H2-S2, S1-S2, H1-H2. More action, less discussion between H1-S2 or H2-S1! Very deliberate (and a little 'cheating') progress up to Big Casino! Very little doubt, but nicely developed.
The series could have benefitted greatly with some basic 'word mechanic' editing, and some plot-development editing would have helped, as well!
4*