All Comments on 'Payback Ch. 03-04'

Love the anticipation!!!left me dripping

I added the chapter!

This could have been such a hot story except for the continual errors disrupting the story's flow. Please have someone review and edit your work before posting your stories; you have great potential. :)

Fuck! This is good but I have to agree - the errors interrupts the flow but I'm so into this that I correct it as I read. However, I must point this out, several times in this story and in part 1, you used "great" for "breast." I'm sure that's auto-correct but it's the wrong word - be careful and if you can't find an editor then have someone else read your story and check for errors. Ok, so back to the story - she duct tapes her mouth and then what happens...

I have won many awards for my writings, not so much erotic ones, but I do admit I'm bad at grammatical errors. It sucks I don't have spell check here.