All Comments on 'Payback's a Bitch but So's My Mom'

In writing, you need to take time fr your characters to have fun. If they don’t, the reader won’t either.

This is rushed. A current mantra in writing is “don’t say, show.” Lose the narrative for dialog. Don’t lay out the cast at the beginning, let the reader figure them out from what happens.

The plot is interesting. The execution could be a ton better.