All Comments on 'Payment for a Chance Encounter Ch. 01'

Some will probably say it is too short, but I’m sure it’s only the beginning. Please don’t make us wait to long.

5*

Tc

Needs edited, very difficult to read. Beginning with the first sentence, perhaps it should read "I'm not sure why, but I woke up"

2nd sentence-normal is used twice

I love it when two siblings love each other and learn together.

Kinda short and to the point but the premise is good. If there is a part two, take your time make some notes before starting and slow down the pace. Like with good sex, make it last.

You need an editor. The plural of breast is breasts... And many others