All Comments on 'Perchance to Dream Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
MORE!!!

Please let there be more, this would be a good romance.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago

Nice story, full of mystery. I see it's entitled Chapter 01 - what happened to chapter 2? I'd really like to read more of this!

jacquimjacquimalmost 12 years ago
The rest?

Nice story, and not just the erotic bits, there's an air of mystery, and a feeling that it should continue - pity that you didn't.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Next chapter, please?

This is an imaginative and well crafted story - I'd love to read more :-)

Paniolo BoyPaniolo Boyabout 14 years ago
Everyone's a critique....

Interesting story line. Very creative and imaginative. Keep it going....

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Lose some exclamation points.

I liked this, found it engaging. However there are WAY too many exclamations. If 3/4 of your story was done in bold type, then after a bit, bold doesn't mean anything anymore. The same goes with exclamation points. You have a couple of paragraphs where EVERY sentence ends in a screamer (exclamation point). It became annoying, especially because most of them were in appropriate. Limit exclamation points mostly to dialog, and even then, use them very carefully. I still liked it, though, and will ready further installments. I gave it a four. J.

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